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Hot but needs editing
It's an interesting world you've created here and definitely erotic but you might want to go over and proofread it. The spell checker won't distinguish differences such as their and there or buy and by for instance. Also editorial notes are not something you want in a published version, that's something you keep separate or in an appendix.
Save the bloodline is a noble cause
However, this one doesn't sound worth the effort!
Arthur
I hate stories like this one where a the guy is middle aged and full of him self,I put my self in the story and I don't want to be a old man and I don't want to be a ahole like him
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