by Loansum
Wonderful story, can't wait for the next chapter. Had me going the whole time thinking of how she was so helpless yet so hot she couldn't say no. I wonder what suprise Jimmy has for her next time.....
You write a good story but you keep switching from a passive voice to first person to second person. It would flow better if you kept the same voice throughout. Keep writing and edit each story to make sure it is in the same voice throughout.
Why did Tammy call Jimmy Tommy and if she doesn't want to get fucked why not just go out and go shopping.
It's getting repetitive. ' no I don't want to' to 'please fuck me'.