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Great but.....
...don't leave it there
alright
It was alright but needed more editing. I will send you a PM or other feedback with more details.
ending needs work
not bad, but ending could have been better.
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Needs some work
I don't like the ending and there are errors that were quite catchable in the story. Is this for the contest?
I'm guessing the fact that Nick is taking an extended vacation is the summer theme.
=)
New Girl on the Block
This is a very sweet & tantalizing romance between two darling young people. But it is frustratingly unfinished (in more senses than one). And there are far too many dumb grammatical errors and misspellings. One strong point is the hyper-hip Granny who loves her granddaughter and the nice boy from next door equally generously and wants them to be together. My 4 Rating is generous.
Wonderful
This was an amazing story although I'm not quite sure how it fits into the theme of the contest. There were some grammar and spelling errors but you really know to write.
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