All Comments on 'First Date'

by Sam204

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PennLadyPennLadyover 14 years ago
Nice twist

Good ending. I really didn't think of that as a possibility. :) I think an editor would have helped here; especially in the beginning, your verb tense is all over the place. Present, then past, then something else. I'm not sure what tense you wanted, and it wouldn't matter, so long as it was consistent. But very sweet. ;)

IwannadoitnowIwannadoitnowalmost 11 years ago
Very sweet story

Loved the surprise at the end!

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