Ms.read, I wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed my listen. That's right, like the male character in this story, I too, am blind. I use talking software to listen to Literotica. I can't say that I have ever heard of anyone posting a story about someone with impaired vision before. Thank you for submitting this story and good luck in the contest. By the way, I've added you as one of my many favorite authors.
Take Care!
W_P
a loving husband and wife. I liked it, but not quite enough to give it more than a four. I will say one negative thing; the flashback to their first time was done rather confusingly.
Great story for the contest. Lovely summer romance. The flashback was a bit confusing. Maybe a section break would help. I loved that the characters were visually impaired. Wonderful tender story.
A clever and tender little tale that packed a lot of character development and plot into some well chosen words. You could feel the love between the characters. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
This is very good. I must say, each word was well chosen and the character development, or more specifically, the love between the two characters was outstandingly evolved. I must disagree with two other posters who stated the flashback was confusing. You had appropriate transitions to alert the reader. Thanks for the great story.
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Anonymous09/01/09
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Was very good, my wife and I had a great courtship, we love to relive some early memories, Thanks.
i liked your story and the way that the longstanding relationship between your characters is clear.
just a quick comment on some of the comments others have made... i didn't really struggle with understanding the flashbacks so much as felt that they caused you to skip away from your present tense action too quickly. i would love to see this story fleshed out a little.
Very enjoyable story. Loved so many details, including the blind hubby. Careful with the global replace. Changing Rob to Owen throughout the story ended up with a "thOwenbing" deep in her womb. An error I've made enough times to recognize immediately. Still enjoyed this story immensely - Good luck in the contest.
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Enjoyed My Read
Ms.read, I wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed my listen. That's right, like the male character in this story, I too, am blind. I use talking software to listen to Literotica. I can't say that I have ever heard of anyone posting a story about someone with impaired vision before. Thank you for submitting this story and good luck in the contest. By the way, I've added you as one of my many favorite authors.
Take Care!
W_P
This was a nice switch,
a loving husband and wife. I liked it, but not quite enough to give it more than a four. I will say one negative thing; the flashback to their first time was done rather confusingly.
Great Story for the contest
Great story for the contest. Lovely summer romance. The flashback was a bit confusing. Maybe a section break would help. I loved that the characters were visually impaired. Wonderful tender story.
Short...and sweet
A clever and tender little tale that packed a lot of character development and plot into some well chosen words. You could feel the love between the characters. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Well Chosen Words
This is very good. I must say, each word was well chosen and the character development, or more specifically, the love between the two characters was outstandingly evolved. I must disagree with two other posters who stated the flashback was confusing. You had appropriate transitions to alert the reader. Thanks for the great story.
That
Was very good, my wife and I had a great courtship, we love to relive some early memories, Thanks.
good luck!
i liked your story and the way that the longstanding relationship between your characters is clear.
just a quick comment on some of the comments others have made... i didn't really struggle with understanding the flashbacks so much as felt that they caused you to skip away from your present tense action too quickly. i would love to see this story fleshed out a little.
thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Very nicely done
Very enjoyable story. Loved so many details, including the blind hubby. Careful with the global replace. Changing Rob to Owen throughout the story ended up with a "thOwenbing" deep in her womb. An error I've made enough times to recognize immediately. Still enjoyed this story immensely - Good luck in the contest.
Sexy
Great story. Good luck in the contest.
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