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Hmmm...
The content was okay, but you are in desperate need of an editor. The numerous spelling and grammatical errors made your story difficult to follow.
Some people are so rude
tho' there are errors in the story, it didn't take away from the more than okay content of it, anyway, the commentator below sounds like Bianca's mum ssssh don't tell, hehehe. But, please don't take another 5 months for the next installment. :)
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hey everyone i know it has errors but i wanted to finish writing it while the creative juices were flowin...ya know...but i really appreciate the constructive critism...thnx!
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I love the story, please continue.
Keepon writing
I enjoyed this a lot. I hope you finish it.
loving it
Tony is so sweet and gentle with her.
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