Although I noticed one or two small errors the story was very entertaining and well written. I enjoyed the suspense and uncertainty at the beginning. I really liked the heroine of the story taking her sister's place and then turning what could have been an awful experience into something good. I thought your characters especially the girl were well thought out and your story line built until the end. I do hope however that the story has not ended just started. Thanks!
by
Anonymous09/04/09
great!
You have a very fluid writing style. I loved the slow build up. When the characters got together, it made sense. There were a few spelling mistakes that tripped me up; but other than that, it was very immersive.
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Anonymous09/04/09
A great beginning.
Wonderfuly written, and a nice length, not too short yet manageable but what happened to the other girls and what happens next, I look forward to chapter two
That was truly excellent. Well paced, nicely romantic, nicely erotic, well developed and likeable female protagonist, interesting ogre. One of the people who commented before me said something like 'excellent beginning, what are you going to do with the others?' I appreciate that the 'others' have narrative purpose in adding to the sense of threat and in pointing up the protagonist's relative calm, but I see this as fundamentally a romance between Caliope and the ogre; you'd kind of weaken it if you have the ogre plough through the extras one after another, in my opinion.
I completely agree with Anonymous in England: a truly GREAT beginning! I do hope there is MORE to this story. Truth be told, I think it could make a SPECTACULAR book! Your attention to detail was very impressive and, as Anonymous in USA wrote, very immersive. The build-up was logical and romantic. My congratulations on a most EXCELLENT story.
Re sharing the cup of wine... I also reacted to this scene and thought as Thelios did and really like it. I think its the 'closeness' and softness it reveals and ads to their unspoken communication. I haven't noticed such lovely details in other writting and hope you will keep both up! ...perhaps also intoduce them in your other alias work?? :)
You are very, very good at this!
:)
I love the entire world you have created. I believe in it and it absorbs me. I also enjoy their sensual connection very much, especially the fact that it has more layers than merely the sexual ones. There is a constantly felt sizzling spark between these two.
Never thought I'd see the day a grey-skinned, red-eyed giant turned me on, but Thelios is sexy as all Hell!
AH
This is my first non human story I've read, I usually stick to a different topic matter. But I was bored and chose to have a look here. I have to say thanks for popping my cherry on this one, it was a well written, funny and very sexy story. And for once I'm glad there are more chapters in a story, since it was so good... Great job and keep it up!
One finds many stories of vamps and Weres on the site. Many of which have many, many chapters. I found this one delightfully refreshing and extremely erotic in all. Great job.
With your writing. You are so very descriptive about the scenery and location that I feel I'm there with these characters. You have reminded me of what's missing in alot of storys. You are so very descriptive in the action of your characters also. The whole bath tub scene was hot and between it and the sex description I was there. I can't wait to read chapter 2 and thru 5 is posted. I may do nothing but catch up on this story today.
To hold myself over for your new chapter - I'm rereading your story (again)!!
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Anonymous03/19/11
im rereading the chapters as well..which i rarely rarely rarely do. really good job. keep going!
by
Anonymous03/24/11
You were right!
I am finally getting around to this submission as promised. After having read this first chapter I can tell you that you were right as I did enjoy the pace of this story better. It may be me but I think that it is more well written too. A little less wordy yet more descriptive at least it seems so to me.
Call me banal but I just plain like it better, more easily relatable. I guess I like my sex more straight forward with passion and a bit of unbridled action. So yep, you were right I like it better so far. I'll look forward to the rest.
Absolutely wonderful piece! I've been having a hard time lately finding well-written stories on here and it's beginning to frustrate me so I am incredibly happy that someone suggested this story to me. ^_^
I'll definitely be reading the other chapters and I hope there's more of a description of the creature because while it has horns, human feet and elongated canines don't sound like a minotaur and I'm curious as to what this creature really is. Of course, I suppose that minotaurs being mythical creatures you can change their looks to your liking as long as the key elements are there.
Every time I read a chapter from Sacrifice, I feel guilty about how my writing isn't nearly as good and it makes me want to do better. I love how you write, the characters you create, the plot, everything.
Absolutely one of the best stories I have had the pleasure of reading on this site. Good build-up, great character development, humor, and fantastic warm and caring sex. I applaud you! I read for emotion, and this emotion was perfect.
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Anonymous09/03/12
Loved it!!!
Just what I was looking for. A great, well-written story with interesting characters. Can't wait to read more!
The an erotica trifecta - great story, great characters, great love scences. Can't wait to read more.
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Anonymous09/27/12
Greatest story EVER
I wish that you would come back and follow up the next chapter.. it has been almost a Year already. I missed this story and kept checking if there are any update. Please update this fantastic story... i am begging you.
You need to update with a chapter 8! Please. I am begging you. This story is marvelous and it breaks my heart that it's left unfinished. Your writing is amazing and I can't imagine the passions you felt as you dreamt up these scenes. Feel them again, and write them for us, so that we can selfishly sate ourselves on your honeyed words. We have been waiting for months, almost years, for your return.
Please, please, please update. I am asking from my knees. We need the rest of this story.
Discovered this series and your writing 3 days ago and am entirely taken by the vibrant characters you've created. They're utterly charming and I'm intrigued by the story line too. If this were a published series, I'd totally buy the books (and even the kindle version!).
I sincerely hope that you get a chance to re-visit this series and this wonderful cast of characters at some point in the future. It would be a pity if life's daily grind prevents you from completing their story.
I shall check your profile intermittently in the hopes that one day, my hopes are realised! That aside, thank you for introducing us to Caliope, Thelios and their friends. My imagination is all the richer for having met them ... (",)
English
Well Done!
Although I noticed one or two small errors the story was very entertaining and well written. I enjoyed the suspense and uncertainty at the beginning. I really liked the heroine of the story taking her sister's place and then turning what could have been an awful experience into something good. I thought your characters especially the girl were well thought out and your story line built until the end. I do hope however that the story has not ended just started. Thanks!
great!
You have a very fluid writing style. I loved the slow build up. When the characters got together, it made sense. There were a few spelling mistakes that tripped me up; but other than that, it was very immersive.
A great beginning.
Wonderfuly written, and a nice length, not too short yet manageable but what happened to the other girls and what happens next, I look forward to chapter two
Bravo !!
I loved it!!
Not my usual....
...interest but well written and developed-pistolpackinpete
Excellent, and surprised me several times
That was truly excellent. Well paced, nicely romantic, nicely erotic, well developed and likeable female protagonist, interesting ogre. One of the people who commented before me said something like 'excellent beginning, what are you going to do with the others?' I appreciate that the 'others' have narrative purpose in adding to the sense of threat and in pointing up the protagonist's relative calm, but I see this as fundamentally a romance between Caliope and the ogre; you'd kind of weaken it if you have the ogre plough through the extras one after another, in my opinion.
Simply. . .FANTASTIC!!!!
I completely agree with Anonymous in England: a truly GREAT beginning! I do hope there is MORE to this story. Truth be told, I think it could make a SPECTACULAR book! Your attention to detail was very impressive and, as Anonymous in USA wrote, very immersive. The build-up was logical and romantic. My congratulations on a most EXCELLENT story.
A few spelling mistakes but otherwise very well
written! And definitely intriguing. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Hopefully you won't make us wait too long!
Fantastic story!
I loved the whole thing, I would definitely read more of your stories. I have only one complaint it ended to soon :)
Fabulous!
Loved it!
holy cow!!
this was a good read.i found my breaths catching in my chest as they made love. please write more and thanks for the story!!
Sequel! Seee-kwell!
More please!
Beautiful story
Very well written and erotic. Thank you for sharing it.
hair
loved the moment when he took her pins out and was letting her hair down... that set the tempo and feel for me!
sharing the drink
Re sharing the cup of wine... I also reacted to this scene and thought as Thelios did and really like it. I think its the 'closeness' and softness it reveals and ads to their unspoken communication. I haven't noticed such lovely details in other writting and hope you will keep both up! ...perhaps also intoduce them in your other alias work?? :)
Erotic, exciting, enthralling
You are very, very good at this!
:)
I love the entire world you have created. I believe in it and it absorbs me. I also enjoy their sensual connection very much, especially the fact that it has more layers than merely the sexual ones. There is a constantly felt sizzling spark between these two.
Never thought I'd see the day a grey-skinned, red-eyed giant turned me on, but Thelios is sexy as all Hell!
AH
That was...
ab-so-lute-ly amazing!
Thank you very much!
What else can I say?
MY First
This is my first non human story I've read, I usually stick to a different topic matter. But I was bored and chose to have a look here. I have to say thanks for popping my cherry on this one, it was a well written, funny and very sexy story. And for once I'm glad there are more chapters in a story, since it was so good... Great job and keep it up!
Wonderful.
One finds many stories of vamps and Weres on the site. Many of which have many, many chapters. I found this one delightfully refreshing and extremely erotic in all. Great job.
wow
This was wonderful! I hope you continuue to submit stories and share your gift with us. Thank you
Impressed
With your writing. You are so very descriptive about the scenery and location that I feel I'm there with these characters. You have reminded me of what's missing in alot of storys. You are so very descriptive in the action of your characters also. The whole bath tub scene was hot and between it and the sex description I was there. I can't wait to read chapter 2 and thru 5 is posted. I may do nothing but catch up on this story today.
To hold myself over for your new chapter - I'm rereading your story (again)!!
im rereading the chapters as well..which i rarely rarely rarely do. really good job. keep going!
You were right!
I am finally getting around to this submission as promised. After having read this first chapter I can tell you that you were right as I did enjoy the pace of this story better. It may be me but I think that it is more well written too. A little less wordy yet more descriptive at least it seems so to me.
Call me banal but I just plain like it better, more easily relatable. I guess I like my sex more straight forward with passion and a bit of unbridled action. So yep, you were right I like it better so far. I'll look forward to the rest.
Ray
BRAVO!!
That was a great tale! You are on my fav list.
Amazing!
Love it! Love it! Love it! More please!
Hmm...
I remember reading about Greek Myths about how minotaurs would order the villagers to send a few of their people to consume.
Wonderful!
Absolutely wonderful piece! I've been having a hard time lately finding well-written stories on here and it's beginning to frustrate me so I am incredibly happy that someone suggested this story to me. ^_^
I'll definitely be reading the other chapters and I hope there's more of a description of the creature because while it has horns, human feet and elongated canines don't sound like a minotaur and I'm curious as to what this creature really is. Of course, I suppose that minotaurs being mythical creatures you can change their looks to your liking as long as the key elements are there.
Very happy with this story!
This is the start of a great story
Thelios sounds yummy
Fabulous
One of the best first times I've certainly read.
Beautiful
Very well-written. This series is a gem. It's hard to find well-written stories here that have intruiging plots that don't feel too forced.
Wonderful
Thank you for this well written story. I think the level of writing was excellent. I look forward to the rest of the series.
A great series
This is my second time reading this series. The story is so good. I loved it so much the first and I looking forwards to all the yummy bits later. ;)
Most excelletn
Every time I read a chapter from Sacrifice, I feel guilty about how my writing isn't nearly as good and it makes me want to do better. I love how you write, the characters you create, the plot, everything.
Second Round Read (Still Loving It)
Fantastic desciption and great character's. Onto Chapter 2 I say!
more please...
...more please... thank you....
wow that was not only an interesting story but really hot o__o write more you're so talented!!
Wow!
Absolutely one of the best stories I have had the pleasure of reading on this site. Good build-up, great character development, humor, and fantastic warm and caring sex. I applaud you! I read for emotion, and this emotion was perfect.
Loved it!!!
Just what I was looking for. A great, well-written story with interesting characters. Can't wait to read more!
Loved it
The an erotica trifecta - great story, great characters, great love scences. Can't wait to read more.
Greatest story EVER
I wish that you would come back and follow up the next chapter.. it has been almost a Year already. I missed this story and kept checking if there are any update. Please update this fantastic story... i am begging you.
Love this!
Probably one of the best stories I've ever read!
wow
Love it!
wow!
loved it! great first chapter!
I like the story.
Amazing! I wish I could give it 10 stars!
You fucking bastard.
You need to update with a chapter 8! Please. I am begging you. This story is marvelous and it breaks my heart that it's left unfinished. Your writing is amazing and I can't imagine the passions you felt as you dreamt up these scenes. Feel them again, and write them for us, so that we can selfishly sate ourselves on your honeyed words. We have been waiting for months, almost years, for your return.
Please, please, please update. I am asking from my knees. We need the rest of this story.
Sincerely,
Your fans.
Chapter 8 Chapter 8
I love this series so much! Please continue!
re read
3rd time. Too bad never finished it. Still a great story.
Wonderful!
Discovered this series and your writing 3 days ago and am entirely taken by the vibrant characters you've created. They're utterly charming and I'm intrigued by the story line too. If this were a published series, I'd totally buy the books (and even the kindle version!).
I sincerely hope that you get a chance to re-visit this series and this wonderful cast of characters at some point in the future. It would be a pity if life's daily grind prevents you from completing their story.
I shall check your profile intermittently in the hopes that one day, my hopes are realised! That aside, thank you for introducing us to Caliope, Thelios and their friends. My imagination is all the richer for having met them ... (",)
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