Tentacles

It Was Okay

I think the story and the idea behind it itself was good. However, some editing and fixing of run-on sentences wouldn't hurt. Otherwise, good story.

Great.

Really enjoyed this story. Almost felt like I was there being fucked myself. Would love to see you writing a sequel to this.

Awesome

I really liked this story and would enjoy a sequel. ;)

Just amazing, write more tentacles!

omg that was soo good. you should write more

Tentacles

Need to work on punctuation and spelling. Have someone edit for you. I did like the story, short and to the "point".1B63

Hot and interesting...

Any prospect of a sequel....?

Punctuation. There for a reason.

Couldn't make it past the first few paragraphs, for the lack of a full stop or two. Or three.

anonymous

anonymous is a twat if he can't see beyond punctuation, and recognize a good story well told

sequel please

You should totally write a sequel, or at least other tentacle stories, it was a really good one

sequel!!

oh my goooooood i love it

slow it down

It was good but slow the initial action a little.

Loved it!!

This was a hot story, but it was a bit slow at first. Other than that, AMAZING!

Well, this is a really hot story in my opinion. I was confused though when they said she was "lucky to have never had the curse of freckles that seemed to plague so many red heads." I've always found freckles really attractive on most people and I don't understand why so many people seem to think of them as a "curse." Other than that I found this to be pretty good though.

Promising Story....

... Ruined by bad writing. Find an editor to work with here at the site.

You're in desperate need of one because apparently you have trouble knowing when to use a comma and a period for which there is truly no excuse if you want to be read and appreciated by your peers anytime soon because truthfully your run on sentences were a great distraction to the otherwise interesting story you were trying to tell unless of course you're satisfied with sub-par readers praising your sub-par work which you might be but you can do better!

More Chapters on this story because I want to find out if she did get pregnant and how many tentacle alien babies she is going to have. So please more chapters okay.
Thank you very much.