I am completely in awe...this is quite possibly the best story you have written to date. Gripping and, at the same time, quite romantic, leaving me near speechless. This is simply not fair to most other writers at Literotica. You're so much beyond the general writing standard for this place. You drew the characters so artistically that they became quite real - people you could care about. A breathtaking & touching story with such a feel-good happy ending. A truly outstanding story, with writing that really made me feel like I was there. You are definitely a cut above most other authors on this site. Looking forward to your next! Pete.
I very rarely read this type of story, but something in the description caught my eye & I had to read this one. I am glad I did. This is a fantastic story.
There is only one word for this story "Fantastic"
Good story, drama, romance, no melodrama, well told, what could be better?
-- srgeek --
I agree entirely with the first four comments.An excellent story.
With the exception of the dialogue/viewpoint on marriage I enjoyed most of the story. Hate that so often men think they can use having more than one woman acceptable. A woman with more than one man -- never noble. But if the viewpoint of not being successful in a singular one on one relationship does work, should we see this scenario in the other direction? No -- because when a man has to share with another man it becomes a new situation but it not.
I agree with the fantasies we heard as a child. Real relationship take work, delayed gratification and the fact that just because you could doesn't mean you should. Also if fairytales are the places you get the ideal of marriage then yeah you got problems.
Hope I didn’t offend. Grow up an AF Brat which brought me to the story and didn’t read that this is you thing to write about.
Scorpio44 is on my list of favorite authors--now I'm going to have to add Scorpio44a. Your previous stories have all been good--no, excellent. But this one stands head and shoulders above the others I've read. The plot was fresh and the characters were realistic. One of the best I've read on Literotica. You're going to have to work hard to write a better story than this one. Thanks for sharing. By the way, even though I wanted to, I couldn't rate this submission greater than 100, but it deserves it.
I was absolutely blown away with this story and cannot wait for your next you are a natural story teller keep up the good work;;;;;;;JAMES
You deserve a 5 squared for this story. There are a lot of good people out there and even though this is fiction is was beyond any others I have read.
Well developed characters and interesting plot.
I look forward to more of your stories.
Once again, you have created an excellent story. I usually don't write comments. Thanks of the good read.
'nuff said. Bravo to you and thank you.
I am not into the group marraiges of Robert Heinlein and Scorpio 44a but I enjoy reading their stories...
nice to know with a mind like that maybe some woman in shit can get
a decent guy afterall.
hope lives eternal
its nice to be nice
good luck a soft paddy.
Another excellent story!
Outstanding! The thing I liked the most is that basically this story was about people finding happiness, and finding a place in this world where they fit in and belong. These are 2 things that I hope to find for myself someday (Not necessarily the TWO women part, lol, but just, you know, finding 'the one' and a place to call Home. Capital 'H' Home, I mean.), but don't have now.
Once again, great job, and I'm going to go check to see if you have any other submissions!
Simply the best story I have ever read on this or any other erotic stories site. Just boggled my mind.
Great character developement and premise.
Another great story. I just love reading your work, very few spelling errors and very few word usage errors. Loved it.
BUT, Scorpio, I have to score only 75 along with "Anon in Real World' because you apparently didn't even read your story through after finishing it. If your had, you surely would have caught the fact that you had them leave the farm home in the small RV and then found the ham in the freezer of the new and larger RV AFTER Nick had changed all items from one vehicle to the other, and it was supposed to be a surprise by the Logans. It is a very good story, but deserves factual accuracy in the story line, which is provided by careful editing.
I loved the story ! It was ,what I would call a real "Feelgood" Story . :) Keep it up :)
Apparently, there are possibilities some people don't easily see. In the case of finding the ham AFTER Nick traded RV's... If the story is closely read he had help transfering all their things from one Rv to the next. Maybe someone else moved the food? Maybe he didn't buy the food in the first place and the ladies bought it. In that case he wouldn't have known the ham was a gift.
Maybe I don't feel the need to explain everything. Careful editing doesn't mean spelling out every detail. However, I will take the coaching and be a bit more careful that the details fit more seamlessly. If that was the biggest error in the story, I think I did well.
I'm not into polygamy but I enjoy a well written feel good story. TY for writing.
Great as always. Keep up the good work. Princess
I even cared about the background characters and wonder what more could have been done with them.
I'm not sure you're receiving all my comments. They don't always show up right after I post them, just the first one of the day. I'm always fond of your stories especially when the end up in Oregon. I couldn't help but smile about your descriptions of the gorge. I couldn't help but smile when you stopped in Troutdale. I had to wonder if you knew they were doing road construction there as you wrote this. Love your work, and look forward to reading the next.
Hi, this story just flowed. It might have been a little transparent but that did not take anything away from the plot. Your future stories are going to have to be something quite special to beat this one. If the mystery of the ham is the only point of contention amongst the critics then you have absolutely nothing to worry about. Thanks for writing and posting your stories where we the reader can appreciate them FOR FREE! Just how good is that! Please never stop writing and posting.
great story, well done. as a retred usaf msgt I knew a few nco's that were real bastards, as a first sargent I handled a few of them. also knew a lot of good men. nice to see someone with the right attitude. keep them coming.
Loved it. Thanks.
Still doing it arent ya..rescuing maidens and slaying dragons --or leaving them in the dust,
Finally the noise is all about the good you have in your writing - about time -
I want to comment on your writing style and delivery. Few (if any) punctuation errors and only occasional mispellings of words that sound the same but have different meanings. Not trying to be critical or petty, your writings are far superior to many of the stories on Literotica. I have almost finished your page of stories, I will be sad when I get done. Please keep writing. Only one of your stories out of a ton did I not care for, it was a BDSM
early on the page. Don't remember anything else about it. Thank you for writing.
There are times when saying thank you seems inadequate...you truly are a gifted writer and that you share that gift freely and without reward is very inspiring...
A hundred times thank you...
I don't know enough superlatives to adequately tell you how I really feel about your writing in general and this story in particular! Excellent, outstanding, simply one of the best, are but a few examples. Thank you for sharing a really fine talent with all of us.
Just re-read. A "5" squared... AA+ story.
Thanks again for sharing on Lit.
gets better every time I read it.
I find a story like this on Lit, and I keep looking for more. This was a great story, mixed with a fine writing style, and a great read all around. Just sex, more sex, and no plot or story gets old fast. This was excellent, THANK YOU
You couldn't ask for a better story! Superbly written and a very good read. I liked it from start to finish, a dream lifestyle ! Five Stars all the way - bring on another similar writing!
I'm totally enthralled with this. It was about people. They were believable, real people. As with most stories, there are some places to suspend belief and just go with it. I'm not sure just where those places were.
Thank you for a truly wonderful story.
I really liked they included the older couple with Thanksgiving. I imagine they will do more than just pay a bill. That couple will have a family.
This is just an amazing and splendid story. I wanted it to just keep going on and on. I hope there will be a sequel.
George in Omaha
As of today, I have read 685 stories (Romance, Mature, Erotic Couplings, Non-Erotic, First Time, Novels and Novellas) on this site. (I know the number because I need a MySQL DB to keep track of what I've read! I've read 5 and am now reading more of your stories, Scorpio44a)
As I am retired Air Force, I search for and focus on romantic stories with some connection to the military.
This story is one of the best I have read! Five Stars is too low a score! The writing, character and plot development are excellent!
I salute you!
Your story was excellent, and completely believable. Since 1978 we've been pleased to share our husband among us ( his 4 wives ), like Nick our man loves us without reservation.
really really great story, i wish you best of luck, and for you to continue writing stories, this is in the top five of all the stories i have red here if not the best, best of wishes
Just finished reading this story for the third time! Still brings tears to my eyes! Thank you for sharing your story with us!
Wonderful story. And thanks for the proper usage of military time. Nice attention to a small detail.
Second reading...a little geography lesson, however. Idaho Falls is out of the way...I believe you actually meant Twin Falls...that makes more sense.
Offutt AFB has an RV park area.
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