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by BrianCaster

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JackLuisJackLuisover 14 years ago
Yes your writing is a direct translation, it seem

Read some Hemingway, or the other Lit stories to catch the taste of English.

This is a narrative, that is a story told by one person with little exposition.

Try now a story from more than one perspective to exercise your descriptions.

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