All Comments on 'Change'

There were so many errors it was almost to distracting to read.

My guess is she got herself pregnant so she didnt have to stay in college and fail. The husband is even dumber, you dont marry pregnant women you send them child support if they can prove who the father is. She fucks a stranger for no real purpose other than she can fuck him while she thinks. Sorta like thinking about your life while you read a book, aint gonna happen. Then she goes home to infect her husband with whatever little diseases or parasites she has acquired. Really isnt much to this and both would be better off divorced. That said you need to have a proofreader and an editor. There were so many errors I almost stopped reading before I got to the park episode. Things such as "But he didn't left" are just to bad to read. It should have read But he didnt leave. The maturity level here in the story is not good.

She cheated once. I wonder if she will cheat again? Good story.Thanks....Rich

....I've seen that you are capable of at least dipping to a 50-this story was almost impossible to read and boring and you give it a 100? Do you drink a lot?-pistolpackinpete

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I see you are Portuguese so obviously English is not your first language. You have a great idea for a story here, all the elements for a very realistic tale. You tell it simply and the emotion comes across very strongly. I think there is potential to expand it, but nevertheless I think it works well. It can be difficult to get an editor but if you could find one to work with I believe it would be worth the effort. You have good ideas

Then Mary [the daughter]comes home for Thanksgiving with her new boyfriend....you guessed it...the guy from the park..."the only constant thing is "change""

The story was good despite the grammar problems. I hope that you continue and find an editor who has english as his/her first language.

You should really get an editor to help you with your English, especially the verbs. The conjugation makes the story very difficult to read. (The "sawing our child" error was kind of funny, though.)

There is nothing here just a dumb husband and a selfish whore of a wife.

be the same again....some way some how she will let it out or he will find out someway ...then what will she do when the shit hits the fan....will she tell him to go fuck someone to make them even ...or will she do as she should and just bring a woman home with her for him....she should really have to watch them ....maybe she should just commit suicide and admit that she is trash and free him to find a woman good enough for him...obviously she is not happy and why even live if youre that unhappy..her hubby deserves better than her

He needs to find out about his whore and beat her to death, hiding the body in the highway right of way.

Good Lord! Get an editor or proof-reader - gaffs as too distracting and make the plot difficult to follow.

what the fuck it got to do with you if digdaddy drink or not you fuckin bleedin heart faggot liberal cunt he only makes comment and enjoy the site not like you fuckin jaded troll prick.

in Humor. I laughed all the way through. Now if you intend to actually write something you will need an editor, either that or do not send it to this site. I suppose that it is cruel to say Humor, but to accept this the Literotica editors must have been on drugs that day.

Empty nest cliche. Not comunnicating cliche. Wife feels justified by her perceptions of the husband's failure cliche. She is not wrong cliche but the husband is cliche. Cheats on the marriage cliche because of all the above cliches. No character development cliche. No logic cliche. Lousy sex decriptiong cliche. No editing cliche. Gosh, wonder what cliched score this deserves? Is this a first try cliche?

What are you trying to say.

She sounds like someone just released from a mentally retarded house.She certainly has a funny way of resolving her problems by cheating. Perhaps she should tell her husband what she did and accepts the consequences.

Their actions are certain, in her mind, and she does not simply say no?

Then let her have consequences and him learn from the whole episode, away from her.

Author - your absence suggests that you finally realized how fucked up you really are and you went to get some professional help. Otherwise, use the handgun and rid the world of your DNA.

He did left her. (HA) That gave her a free pass. Not that I agree, but fair is fair. Will it happen again? Tune in next week for another chapter of "What The Fuck." Same bat time. Same bat channel.

Shit. I just showed my age.

HA

or lack thereof, come out of the frigging closet man! wear those horns proudly!

I HATE anon assholes who make comments without reading the tale. They all probably swallow large loads of horse cum.

HA Ha ha

I would have given this higher marks, but it is so poorly written with so many mistakes the best I could do was two stars; I don't think I've ever seen such a short story with so many grammatical errors.

I'm assuming English is not your first language but you should get an editor then.

A cheating fucking piece of shit cunt is still a cheating piece of shit cunt no matter how they fuck up the English language.

Thanks for sharing.

better title to change... headed to divorce and changing your name back to your maiden name. does she think her husband would have been so worried sick and teary eyed if he had known of her cheating? I also wonder, what would have happened if not only she confessed to her adultery, and at the same time so did he by chance during the night? I could see a quick ending divorce. There is no hope here, as long as she keeps this secret of hers inside. Their marriage is doomed no matter what. He walked out to think and never thought of cheating, sadly she left for a day and had an affair?

Not a bad story.. Just NOT presented in an acceptable fashion.. There are a bunch of stories fitting this slice of married life... Yes spelling and sentence structure should be better allowing for better flow... reader must read between the lines sorry a 2

Sorry it was just to hard to read . So I gave up 1/4 way through it.

Didn't like it much and it had some missed words making it hard to follow. But you wrote it. Keep trying. 3*s

she reminded you of your dead ex wife who fucked all those men!! He middle name was slt and yours was CUCK!!!

Ugly, horrible executed, poor written, nonsense, low context, and not even hot nor sexy story.

Wasted of time reading all this crap.

1* for this trash.

You would always know that you were a cheating whore, and so who your asshole lover.

Retribution

nothing but a nasty whore ,why not divorce him. theres o love in your heart.

Difficult to read because of all the mistakes. I'm not sure whether the author does not speak English ( as a first language ), or just sloppy

Truly such a well written, deep look into an unhappy wife, in a real story.

Sorry my bad, I thought it was opposites day

Horribly written story to appeal to those males here who are too wimpy to satisfy their wives and have repressed homosexual feelings, it failed from the start, it wasnt real and it truly sucked.

Learn how to write and I'll read it after you republish.

why whore divorce the man and move on cunt .its bad enough to cheat ,and make it worse by lieing.

I liked it but you need a spell and grammar checker.