The sex was ok, but could have been better timed. It moved too quick from foreplay to sex and wasn't very descriptive about the feeling (orgasms, ect.) Also I was caught by the line "Byron told her she had herself figure. Cathy said thanks, wore her clothes back on and returned to her chair just when her boyfriend inquired as to what sort of feature she would be in." I think you could do better with some kind of editor to proof your work.
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Anonymous09/24/09
Another dumb white girl being bred IR
Hope she ditched her boyfriend first
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Anonymous09/24/09
Another tiny dicked nigger fantasy.
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Anonymous09/24/09
oh that was really
hard work and so much imagination, completly new with lots of ideas, wow
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Anonymous09/28/09
Too Rush
Was a great idea, but your really rushed. DFo more build up and detail next time.
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Anonymous01/11/14
all women fantasize about a black cock
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Anonymous07/28/16
Very much in line with real life-like situations, good reading to say the least.
English
Another
fucked up nigger fantasy.
nothing new, needs some work
The sex was ok, but could have been better timed. It moved too quick from foreplay to sex and wasn't very descriptive about the feeling (orgasms, ect.) Also I was caught by the line "Byron told her she had herself figure. Cathy said thanks, wore her clothes back on and returned to her chair just when her boyfriend inquired as to what sort of feature she would be in." I think you could do better with some kind of editor to proof your work.
Another dumb white girl being bred IR
Hope she ditched her boyfriend first
Another tiny dicked nigger fantasy.
.
oh that was really
hard work and so much imagination, completly new with lots of ideas, wow
Too Rush
Was a great idea, but your really rushed. DFo more build up and detail next time.
all women fantasize about a black cock
Very much in line with real life-like situations, good reading to say the least.
And
And then what?
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