It's All in the Game Ch. 04

Fine Story

These Lovett stories have a mixture of all emotions and a fine underlying plot. Thanks for posting Stultus.
Regards,
Bruce

GOOD STORY

Never mind the naysayers, you have a great talent and use it well. Some readers may not fully appreciate every single story you write but appreciate the fact that you take the trouble to write. They're your stories and to hell with what others think about plot, execution, etc.
I find your stories entertaining and usually very good.
I've read this on your other site and enjoyed it before,so this comment is just to thank you again for the privilege of being able to exercise my imagination over your prose.

Good story, but

The first and second chapters were very good, the third was okay, but this last one seemed to totally lack direction. He did get over his first wife and that was a good thing.
A town in the lower 48 where you cannot reasonably drive out once winter begins. I am really skeptical.

Oregon winter roads

First of all, thanks to the many folks who enjoyed the story. My ten other Lovett stories (and about 30+ other tales) are still only posted at my other site, but I'm slowly getting things added over here.

Concerning the reader who thought it was impossible for anyone to get trapped for the winter on a road in the lower 48 states, please Google "James Kim". That road in Oregon is infamous for trapping and killing unsuspecting early winter drivers. It's just a summer logging road through the mountains but it appears on many state highway maps and many GPS travel planners as the fastest route to the coast.

Good but tailed off

Really liked the first three chapters but this fourth/final chapter left me at a loss. No resolution to the paternity with his daughter and the feelings on both sides. Marsha was way to far ahead of him in the swinging scene (from the story development) for him to catch up that quickly - if he ever could. He and Becky should have had a final face to face / heart to heart to finish things and never a double wedding. there should have been some direct resolution/dialogue with the daughter. You appear to have lost focuc and direction and just wanted to finish it

What a doormat

I liked it.

I do wish you'd work on dialog a bit, though. Several of your stories have had some issues with that.

what

what happened to the daughters in the final chapter?.a very good story.keep up the great work.I think you are a very very good writer.

The total story

The total story is just plain not realistic. However, it its a fun read to fantasy. Now isn't that what a story is suppose to be, a flight of the author's imagination?

1*

what is this bullshit of being all friendly with the cheating cunt? fucking WIMP!

And of course...the final score

So you pulled it out in the ninth;-)
Just. Overall a very uneven hodgepodge of elements that mostly misses yet somehow manages to come through in the end. I'm not sure I could explain it...cause you sure didn't help much by writing it.

Oh by the way what happened to Olivia (other than being pissed about a missed birthday) going from the only thing you're living for to being gone for a year in the mid teens...seriously. That has to be a huge, heaping, helping of poor, poor pitiful me 😫

Sorry

I can understand his being upset but to just walk out on his daughter for over a year? Without planning ahead of time? What is the daughter supposed to think, another parent just abandoned her. What the hell. Shitty dad of the year. And then to come back and find the person he loves swinging and he is cool with it? After being butt hurt about his first love cheating? No sorry, way to far out there to be any where near believable. Too many loose ends and unbelievable behaviors.