...and best in the series so far. In fact each one is better than the last. I don't know how you do it. Don't listen to the negative naysayers, just keep on doing what you're doing, please!!!
I noticed and the couldn't find an error early on on page 2. There's a "the" that should be a they or then.
Additionally, "Dawn couldn't bare the idea of my hard cock staying uncovered for very long" should be "bear" as in stand unless you are making a pun.
http://www.beedictionary.com/common-errors/bare_v s_bear
Keep it up.
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Anonymous12/26/14
Great stories, but you need to keep the names straight
I've been enjoying several of your stories lately, but I feel like every one has had at least one instance of a wrong name. In this chapter, you said Misty (where I assume you meant Dawn), even though there's no one named Misty in the story. You've got some great stories, but it's a little distracting when there's suddenly a name that's never been mentioned before.
every chapter is hotter than the last...btw... thank you for not having these women taking it analy every time there is sex. a little is ok. id say that the dp at the end of this chapter was just the right amount...good job so far!!!!!!!
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Kudos....
FUCKING A!!!!
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Gary
garyandrewsbodyguard@yahoo.c om
I usually avoid group sex stories
but was some of the HOTTEST action I have ever read. Please More
great
You can have a fallback as a groupsex author, the focus of this story has never been the incest, it was eroticism all around.
You somehow made about the sex, which is good for the reader, it re-sensitizes us to the incest kink.
It reads like a fluffed story, which is still believable and fun in a good way. Bravo on creating such a balanced story.
your my hero
some stories that are meant to be realistic are so far fetched and out of this world but you managed to pull it off beautifully. kudos
HOT
I'M LOVEING IT.
Fuck'n Hot!
Best I've ever read...
...and best in the series so far. In fact each one is better than the last. I don't know how you do it. Don't listen to the negative naysayers, just keep on doing what you're doing, please!!!
Small edit
Loved the story and series.
I noticed and the couldn't find an error early on on page 2. There's a "the" that should be a they or then.
Additionally, "Dawn couldn't bare the idea of my hard cock staying uncovered for very long" should be "bear" as in stand unless you are making a pun.
http://www.beedictionary.com/common-errors/bare_v s_bear
Keep it up.
1
of worse in l w
Great stories, but you need to keep the names straight
I've been enjoying several of your stories lately, but I feel like every one has had at least one instance of a wrong name. In this chapter, you said Misty (where I assume you meant Dawn), even though there's no one named Misty in the story. You've got some great stories, but it's a little distracting when there's suddenly a name that's never been mentioned before.
i dont know how you do it
every chapter is hotter than the last...btw... thank you for not having these women taking it analy every time there is sex. a little is ok. id say that the dp at the end of this chapter was just the right amount...good job so far!!!!!!!
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