The Taking of the Moon Maiden

Great start

It's a bit short, but I would love to read more.

Need more plz!

Really, Really good so far! Need more though, please. You've got me hooked. Please keep writing. I've become a fan.

Needs some work - particularly concerning the historical accuracies. Some grammatical/spelling editing would be good, too. Overall, though, it's a very good start.

how come emelline is eighteen when moira is six..earlier u mentioned that when emelline was born matilda was four years old and when moira was conceived matilda was eighteen..so there is 4 years age gap betwen matilda and emelline..therefore now when moira is six emelline must be twenty years old..

WOW

great beginning. Hope Duncan gets what he deserves. 5 Stars for this beginning.