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Good
I read your bio essay deal and was wondering if this story is based off your life. I don't k ow if you may have mentioned this in the begaining so just wondering.
really good!!
would love to read more!!!!!
More!
Really like your style of writing. This story is EXCELLENT. It was so intense, emotional, and beautiful. Thank you for sharing it. Hope you'll be able to make more timely installments as I am eagerly awaiting more.
Hello Lady Lana
Good start to a story. Not too many details yet but that's okay. Anyway nice first chapter and yes I would like you to continue.
Nice but get an editor
This is the first story of yours that I have read. It took 773 words before I discovered that you were writing about a woman (men get raped too). You should get an editor. You have "Id" not I'd", "I had been thought worse", should be "through". You also had many incomplete sentences. The reason it is important is that your mistakes take me, your reader, out of your story. That said, you got me interested in what would happen! Thanks for writing. - Ttom
It's Alright
A few rough spots as others mentioned, but not a bad concept. I would love for you to continue.
From LadyLana
Okay guys, I did say I didn't have an editor for this, but I do now. I have noticed the mistakes and I will be re-submitting the edited version, along with chapter 2. Like I said, I have had a lot on right now, and I wanted to see the general reaction before either continuing, or pulling it.
Thanks for reading, and I do appreciate the feedback.
lovely concept
I really like where you are going with this...a few mistakes but i noticed like everyone else that you said it hadnt been given to an editor...but now you hvae one..so please keep going...ignore haters..!! wonderful story!!!
Poizon is your editor? Oh my.
Is that not a case of the blind leading the blind? Or rather the bland leading the bland? ·Whatever. This is a non story. I'm glad to see you've given up. But in real life I wish you well.
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I LOVE THIS STORY!!! PLZ UPLOAD MORE!!!
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