Taste Test Ch. 02

Good Read

I especially enjoyed the part where his hot dripping wet sister wrapped her head in a turbine.

hot

Please write another sequel!!!! I wonder if his sister is on birth control...

Spell check

Good story, pity you dont check your spelling

Please, we need more!

Really hot story, I can hardly wait for the next chapter!

Details make a finished work

Com'on! Spelling, tense, plural, grammar!! You have conceived and written a good story, but line after line is spoiled by correctable trivia. The job's not done until the last paper is clean. If you cannot edit yourself, find some help to proofread and edit.

so-so

you could be a good writer but you need to get a good editor and never post a story with one it is obvious that english is not your first language so either post your stories in your native language or find an editor that will correct all your many mistakes readers do not like having to figure out what a bad writer is trying to say so do us a favor and get an editor and rewrite all your stories and never post another without going through an editor

not bad

Spelling

A good flow of ideas BUT you need some extensive work on your spelling. You have used a spell checker? but too many incorrect corrections make the story flow stumble.

yeah 2

hot little minx is teri her bro is a lucky boy..but as the other critic said your spelling is a bit off