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Karen's Ghoulie Gangbang

bySean Renaud©
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by FaithWhite10/08/09

Interesting

Too many spelling and grammatical errors got in my way of reading this story.
I liked the idea of it but it needs some work before it's perfect.

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by PrincessErin10/12/09

Editor Needed

This was a good story but the spelling errors drove me crazy.

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by Tx Tall Tales10/14/09

Interesting concept

More buildup, and more terror before the ghoulish rape would have been nice. A little editing would have helped. Good luck in the contest.

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by Anonymous10/18/09

great story

great story, got me horny

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by Anonymous10/19/09

started good, but went downhill from there

I felt the first straight horror part of the story was written well, but the story went downhill from there. The segue into the rape was poor. I have no idea why Karen has become the 'zombie queen', or what the zombies have need of a queen for. Best of luck with future stories!

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by Master_Vyle09/13/10

Interesting

Interesting story. I thought it was pretty good, but is there a follow up to explain the events near the end?

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by Anonymous07/30/13

I don't get the end.

I really liked this until right near the end. It would have given it one star more if it had stopped at the "So this is how the world ends?". Nice short story, the twist is her coming back. But I really don't get the few paragraphs that come after this, it seems the story veered off on a weird tanget.

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by Anonymous02/26/14

The only one?

Am I really the only one who understands the end? I mean Legion? Him? You don't understand that? He wasn't telling her she was "Queen of the Zombies," he was saying, she was chosen as bride to Satan, and they wanted to overthrow God.

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