All Comments on 'The Great Halloween Costume Mix-up!'

Good luck in the Halloween contest, seth. I really like your story - it's sweet and funny, and very sexy! You just keep growing and getting better as a writer. Nice job. xx

Great story Seth!

it started out very unrealistic no guy that had as much trouble with his sister as he did would ever go to the same college or even be nice to her he sure wouldn't go to her party and it is very unlikely she would have asked anyway the end was better but it still was as a total unrealistic and against human nature keep trying but keep it realistic and believable people rarely forgive relatives and if they do it takes years of being away from each other keep it in mind next time

Sorry, haven't read your tale. But the last post was, if I counted right, 85 words, with no punctuation. (Won't comment on grammar or content.)

How do such people dare to touch their keyboards?

It could happen! At least I hope it could happen. A good thought though, about a young brother getting to fuck his older sister. Maybe you could write another chapter on how it worked out for them. I would hope they fucked like rabbits and found that they really wanted to be together. Thanks .....Rich

A good story although a little short and in need of more detailed sex. Good luck in the contest.

Sis sure learned see her brother in a different light. Could have more development of the sex scenes to make it more interesting.

I really enjoyed your story, sethp! I thought it was an outstanding entry!

I loved your descriptions. I could really feel the narrator's tension, desire, and confused yet extremely horny feelings!

Nice story - packed a lot of content in just one page. Favorite line was: Iron Mime. Good luck in the contest.

not what i expected... but I kind of liked it... in some strange psycho-analytical way ;-)

not what i expected... but I kind of liked it... in some strange psycho-analytical way ;-)

thoroughly enjoyed your tale...Thanks for sharing.

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But What the fuck! I was reading other's comments to your story, and do I read correctly, one commenter gave you a '50' because of another reader's comments? And that, without even reading your story! As if you had any control over what others write in their comments! There's no accounting for it...

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Well, any way, I enjoyed your story. The only flaw I found was a 'then'/'than' confusion. But that didn't detract one bit from the story.

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Jacks

lovely story...just needed to b bit longer

Character development, then again I'm somewhat of an avid reader. Details are what I love. The story was a great one. I don't know if your familiar with music but i like what is called a "Crescendo". In music its the building of a note from a low pitch to a high pitch, tension building the entire time.

You had no crescendo, it was just BAM, lets fuck. But like I said; all in all, a good read.

I was afraid it was over when the kid ran home, but then it just got hotter!

Thought the story was way to short but was well one of the best, hottest i've red..........EVER!!

Really good story. Don't think my cock has been so long in a long time

started out very stupid but the end was ok. the begining sucked why would he go to the same college as his sister if they didn't get along. why would he bother to go to the party? it seems like two different people wrote this one the begining and one the end and never talked to each other while doing it.

Cost. Convenience. Maturity.

Chapter 2 should be her helping him score with Jenny.

Does this story need a part 2?

yes, it needs a part 2...cuz its awesome!

Definitely needs part 2

Amazing best Halloween fanfiction ever great job

but just to let you know "thAn" is spelled with an A NOT an E as in then. KNOW THE FUCKING DIFFERENCE.

I was willing to give some of your other stories a shot after the errors in The Amnesia of Beth's Father but your disclaimer at the beginning of the very next one I chose (this one) starts off with "(Special thanks to Pennlady, although she can only help a retard like me so much) A RETARD??? That is beyond offensive to me and I dare say a lot of others so going to have to rethink whether I can read anymore of your stuff.

It's just a fucking word. Great story.

Spoiled by the crap about the pill and him pulling out

THAN IS SPELLED WITH AN "A" NOT AN "E" DUMMY!!! know the difference between then and than...

Who is Iron Mime? Of course Otis and Tom are the same height and build...It would have been more interesting / realistic if the costume was either just a bit too small or a bit too large. Wonder Woman is my favorite superhero. Lynda Carter is a goddess. I am curious to read the next chapter. Does Jenny get to have Tom or Otis? Does Brenda get to have Jenny? Hmm, inquiring minds want to know.

I thought this story was just a way to show a sex scene between siblings. The story sucked when you take that away. There are too many unanswered questions, like what was Tom so pissed at Brenda for that he left the party. I mean he's supposedly a good guy so did Brenda cheat on him? The whole Jenny thing, at the end Brenda says she's not going to help Otis get with Jenny which is fine but where in the story did it ever come up that she WAS going to do that? Anyways, it is what it is. It could have been better if you focused more on the story however.

Good work and I would more with these two.

But I gotta know if Tom fucked Jenny?

Poor Jenny Hinkle missed out big time!

Hopefully there's a part 2 where Brenda and Otis enjoy each other without parents finding out.

And part 3 where Otis gets Jenny.

What was Brenda so upset about with Tom? Lol.

You could have fleshed this story out a bit more, but nice short story. Thanks