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The Great Halloween Costume Mix-up!

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by chargergirl10/11/09

Good luck!

Good luck in the Halloween contest, seth. I really like your story - it's sweet and funny, and very sexy! You just keep growing and getting better as a writer. Nice job. xx

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by Anonymous10/11/09

Great Story! Loved it also!

Great story Seth!

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by Anonymous10/11/09

started bad

it started out very unrealistic no guy that had as much trouble with his sister as he did would ever go to the same college or even be nice to her he sure wouldn't go to her party and it is very unlikely she would have asked anyway the end was better but it still was as a total unrealistic and against human nature keep trying but keep it realistic and believable people rarely forgive relatives and if they do it takes years of being away from each other keep it in mind next time

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by Scotsman6910/11/09

last post..

Sorry, haven't read your tale. But the last post was, if I counted right, 85 words, with no punctuation. (Won't comment on grammar or content.)

How do such people dare to touch their keyboards?

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by digdaddyrich10/11/09

A good realistic story

It could happen! At least I hope it could happen. A good thought though, about a young brother getting to fuck his older sister. Maybe you could write another chapter on how it worked out for them. I would hope they fucked like rabbits and found that they really wanted to be together. Thanks .....Rich

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by PrincessErin10/12/09

Good

A good story although a little short and in need of more detailed sex. Good luck in the contest.

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by Ducky710/12/09

Good story I liked it.

Sis sure learned see her brother in a different light. Could have more development of the sex scenes to make it more interesting.

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by oldwayne10/12/09

Outstanding tale!

I really enjoyed your story, sethp! I thought it was an outstanding entry!

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by Plainly_Jane10/13/09

Short but very sweet

I loved your descriptions. I could really feel the narrator's tension, desire, and confused yet extremely horny feelings!

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by Tx Tall Tales10/14/09

Fun Story

Nice story - packed a lot of content in just one page. Favorite line was: Iron Mime. Good luck in the contest.

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by busty_jessica_210/15/09

not bad

not what i expected... but I kind of liked it... in some strange psycho-analytical way ;-)

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by busty_jessica_210/15/09

not bad

not what i expected... but I kind of liked it... in some strange psycho-analytical way ;-)

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by jacks4u10/20/09

I liked it.

thoroughly enjoyed your tale...Thanks for sharing.

But What the fuck! I was reading other's comments to your story, and do I read correctly, one commenter gave you a '50' because of another reader's comments? And that, without even reading your story! As if you had any control over what others write in their comments! There's no accounting for it...

Well, any way, I enjoyed your story. The only flaw I found was a 'then'/'than' confusion. But that didn't detract one bit from the story.

Jacks

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by Anonymous02/18/10

wow

lovely story...just needed to b bit longer

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by tonyllamaguy05/05/10

Need More

Character development, then again I'm somewhat of an avid reader. Details are what I love. The story was a great one. I don't know if your familiar with music but i like what is called a "Crescendo". In music its the building of a note from a low pitch to a high pitch, tension building the entire time.

You had no crescendo, it was just BAM, lets fuck. But like I said; all in all, a good read.

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by peebudy07/09/10

great story!

I was afraid it was over when the kid ran home, but then it just got hotter!

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by Anonymous11/21/10

OMG

Thought the story was way to short but was well one of the best, hottest i've red..........EVER!!

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by Anonymous12/10/11

Really good story. Don't think my cock has been so long in a long time

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by Anonymous12/29/12

not to good

started out very stupid but the end was ok. the begining sucked why would he go to the same college as his sister if they didn't get along. why would he bother to go to the party? it seems like two different people wrote this one the begining and one the end and never talked to each other while doing it.

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why would he go to the same college as his sister?

Cost. Convenience. Maturity.

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Good, but too short.

Chapter 2 should be her helping him score with Jenny.

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by sethp05/23/13

Part 2?

Does this story need a part 2?

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by Anonymous07/05/13

part2

yes, it needs a part 2...cuz its awesome!

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by Anonymous11/03/13

part 2?

Definitely needs part 2

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by Anonymous08/28/15

Amazing

Amazing best Halloween fanfiction ever great job

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by Anonymous02/01/17

Nice story 5*'s

but just to let you know "thAn" is spelled with an A NOT an E as in then. KNOW THE FUCKING DIFFERENCE.

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Before I even read it...

I was willing to give some of your other stories a shot after the errors in The Amnesia of Beth's Father but your disclaimer at the beginning of the very next one I chose (this one) starts off with "(Special thanks to Pennlady, although she can only help a retard like me so much) A RETARD??? That is beyond offensive to me and I dare say a lot of others so going to have to rethink whether I can read anymore of your stuff.

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