by Tx Tall Tales
I Would pay money to see this movie. Awesome
Better than all the rest (sing along, everybody).
Long time fan, and this is your best yet.
I really enjoyed your story and it did bring back memories of why I read the entire GOR series as a teen. I really hope that you write a follow up story about the party. There are some great story possibilities there.
I, too, would hope to see a follow up at the party! Very good writing, enjoyed it thoroughly.
Although I don't normally like stories in this category I did enjoy reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Hard to think there is another better - but all can try!
kajira was so excited to see a story of her land of Gor! The story was very well done, though gyrl wishes a brand or piercing would have happened, as on Gor. Maybe the next chapter?
Very nice story. This one really calls out for a sequel or two. The only thing I didn't like was that it was tough at times to figure out which woman was being referred to, since so many ways were used (their names, Gor terms, Pretty vs. Sweet, blonde vs brunette, etc).
Loved the Gor references. It didn't even hit me when I read the title! Awesome!
Not into BDSM but I have to say that was one good story and a well deserved '5'. Good luck in the contest.
DG
To begin with the ending, Halloween doesn't just come once a year for me and mine. Halloween is the time to be one's true self under the deniability that it's "just a costume". And what you learn about yourselves on Halloween can last a lifetime.
The content was mostly delightfully Gorean, but as a Lifestyler I must take exception to one comment. It is the paragraph that ends with, "In the end, often as not, the slave girl conquers the master." More often than not, a love slave finds her love master, but he rules. The love slave may find Master has bought more kajirae for his pleasure garden to -give-her-competition- keep her company, or that she must service Master and a paga slave on their nights out.
In a few cases, slave girls conquer mere males, but men soon remind them both who is man and who is kajira. In Chapter 15 of "Mercenaries of Gor" (pages 156-163, DAW edition and 154-163, E-Reads edition. Borders Books allows you to Google-search the E-Reads version.) Deitrich of Tarnberg steals the spoiled slave of Myron, Polemarkos of Temos, pumps her for information, reduces her to proper slavery again and gives her to a deserving low-ranking soldier for his use.
I regret that this paragraph cost you some points.
Gor has ways of reminding men that they are men, and reminding women that men will leave them if they fail to be pleasing. The only way for males to lose power to women is to abdicate their place as men. It is better to be a man than a mere male.
I wish you well.
Tx another good tale. All the Gore anyone could ask for.
Nothing new same old shit over and over.
Please finish this story properly. What happens to the wife when he sells her at the party?
Great story. I loved the character build up. The bondage was intense yet playful and fun.
Like the other comment, you left us wondering what happened (1) at, and (2) after the party. Great story.
This a good story. I liked it. As I do all of your work that I have read thus far (the Perfect Game series and CvsN 1-26). And while I have not commented on any of the others, I feel compelled to do so now.
Having said that...what happened? You totally left us hanging. Which is fine, if one knows that another chapter is available (or coming) and gets to find out what happened next. But this story ends just as the heat was turning into a smoldering burn. I *want* to read about the party. I *want* to read about the after party. I *really want* to see Amanda reveal her true nature...she is an ice princess because she is bored and unsatisfied with the vanilla...give her what she wants. Make her a slave. It would be wonderful to have those wants satisfied.
Now please forgive me if I seem like I am trying to tell you *how* to write. I would never be so presumptuous as to tell another writer how to spin his yarn, I am after all a writer not an editor, but as a reader I humbly present what we would like to see. Whether you add another chapter or not...Kudos...I really do like your stories..a LOT.
This a good story. I liked it. As I do all of your work that I have read thus far (the Perfect Game series and CvsN 1-26). And while I have not commented on any of the others, I feel compelled to do so now.
Having said that...what happened? You totally left us hanging. Which is fine, if one knows that another chapter is available (or coming) and gets to find out what happened next. But this story ends just as the heat was turning into a smoldering burn. I *want* to read about the party. I *want* to read about the after party. I *really want* to see Amanda reveal her true nature...she is an ice princess because she is bored and unsatisfied with the vanilla...give her what she wants. Make her a slave. It would be wonderful to have those wants satisfied.
Now please forgive me if I seem like I am trying to tell you *how* to write. I would never be so presumptuous as to tell another writer how to spin his yarn, I am after all a writer not an editor, but as a reader I humbly present what we would like to see. Whether you add another chapter or not...Kudos...I really do like your stories..a LOT.
This was an incredible and emotional piece. A lot more going on then just sex. I found it positively wonderful.
I like the dominant touch, but that he didn’t go so far that his wife thought less of him. The competition was a nice touch also, driving her to give more than she was previously willing to give…
(As for the unGorean reference)
It takes a lot more effort to keep and care for what you've got then to toss it aside for something new... like a wife?
At least that was what I thought he was trying to do in the story.
Well Done
This was an awesome story, but I need to know what happened at the party and after.
I totally agree that it was kinda frustrating to use several different IDs for the two slave wenches interchangeably while Hubby was alternating from one to the other AND shifting positions. I had a choice between mapping the space, putting dolls in the picture and keeping an ID key handy so I knew who was getting whom in what...OR just figuring that I didn't really care which wench was getting molested, since I knew that the Master was happy! Guess which way I went? Hint: I didn't bring in any dolls!
Sounds like the party will be anticlimactic compared to the preparation! Good read (once I got my priorities straight!) thanks!
I had to read this after reading your 2012 entry which is part 2. They do stand apart so it was not a problem. Reading this after part 2 just files in the blanks. Not a fan of BDSM but this was more focused on mild role playing. Very exicting and sexy.
That code & love are timeless . A story of a couple's armored hearts finding each other's true width and breath, ten years after meeting for the first time. Ha! Great read.
You wrote this so well and kept me interested from beginning to end. So interested, I will read part 2 as soon as I can close this one out. Well hubby seem real happy fucking his wife and her sister. Have not fucked the sister yet, but oh so close. Who will buy who and what will the new masters want and demand? What punishments lay ahead?
John Norman's Gor novels gave a young fledgling dominant direction for all of those "sinful, disturbing, dirty thoughts" all those years ago when I found a copy of "Marauders of Gor" I quickly became obsessed with finding as many of the novel through Dewey's decimal system as I could. This story upholds those traditions and follows Mr. Norman's vision very closely. Very well done!
I began to read the John Norman Gor series in the late '60s and was interrupted by the military. I thought that they stopped and after reading the first Gor-ey Halloween story I searched on line and found that not only was the author still alive but that he is still writing the series. Thank you Tx Tall Tales for reuniting with a great series.
I enjoyed the story. Fun, well written and the memories it invoked were super. I started reading the Gor novels in the late 60's after buying one in an airport gift shop on my way to my last VN tour (also bought "The Story of O" at the same time but that's another story.) Many in the BDSM community in the 80's and 90's particularly, were dismissive of the Goreans in the life. What they didn't like to admit were the influences of the Gor novels on pretty much the full gamut of the BDSM scene. Thanks for the story.
I read 2 or 3 of the Gor books before the lack of sex in the stories made me lose interest.
However your A "Gor-y Halloween" was a tour-de-force by comparison and is worthy of a whole Galaxy full of stars rather than the puny 5 stars allowed by Literotica.
**"Gorsh !!!" Goofy
Having been to sexy Halloween parties and experienced the D/s, M/s myself, this is a very erotic story. Just as I have come to appreciate in your writing style a good story with just enough eroticism to make it exciting and interesting. I am going to have to check out the Gor books by John Norman.
PS - I am a big fan of Boris Vallejo and Julie Bell's work, made me appreciate the story even more.
As another commenter mentioned, too many different names for the two women, and to many shifts without adequately identifying who was involved at the various points.
4* my wife was my kajira for 20 years before she passed, and it was her choice in books and lifestyle and she introduced me to it. She had all the books............
The author (sic! Scribbler is more accurate!) of the Gor series is a misogynistic, bellicose chauvinistic warmonger, better suited for life in Sparta in 490 B.C. than the 21st Century. He has all the intellectual development and sexual maturity of a 12 year old boy.
This Literotica author is only half as well devloped as John Lange (John Norman's real name).
You have a way with erotica. Your descriptions give the reader a bit of a flutter in the pit of their stomach. The reader is able visualize the scene and the action. I guess Jack and Amanda’s love life has become stale because she is a submissive and a little bi-sexual and he has just found the right buttons to push. The addition of Teri to the mix is what tipped scales and has created a sexual setting all three will enjoy for a long time to come, and maybe save their marriage.
I like the tensions that build and the different mental states that are gone through to get there. Delightful and insightful erotica writer.
You have me now, seriously looking forward to the story of the party and Amanda's true flowering as a Gor slave. Her friend new the buttons to push and Jack responded well, treating Amanda as his slave. It was wonderful the way she let herself be used, both mouth and pussy, with Teri naked in bed and Jack also playing with her.
I didn’t like the one or two Gor books I read, I wanted less politics and more sex - your story is what I wanted! I especially loved the husband and wife rekindling, that felt very real. Well done!
Loved it. I too found the John Norman novels when a teenager in the early 70's . Unfortunately my ex didn't like anything about them.
Also unfortunately for me, single parenthood became my life.... And now, much past my prime, I regret too much the missed opportunities in the previous three decades........ I may yet write and submit some of my fantasies for your perusal.
I gave it a one star review after the 2 moms 2 laps with no finish but then I saw part 2, so a realistic 5 stars until I find out if part 2 finishes the tale.
Bill S.