A story that long and stopping it on a "I'm not sure of the outcome" note it NOT an ending. If you're gonna repost these things, at least make a fucking reason for doing so like finishing the fucking story.
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Anonymous10/18/09
JPB hate endings
I think it´s his way to make a revenge against his bad luck(3 failed marriages, right?) in your own life(something like the best ending is still to come).
Easy come, easy go, doesn't matter as long as the cheatin' one goes.
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Anonymous10/18/09
How do you fuck a bitch that has been pumped up
somewhere else? Hell the time in the restaurant I would have told her I knew about her and her brush cut mustache guy and laffed in her face. On the other end of the coin you write a lot of stories. To many stories to make typos, spelling errors, and grammar errors. Take the line. "I made it clear to him that all we were ever going to be was friends." This one of a few I caught in the story and some of them were bad enough to yank me off the train of throught. Spell check doesnt work when you spell the wrong word right. Get a proofreader or good editor.
This one was not bad, fairly well-written, but it suffers from the already-mentioned (by other readers) weak and uncertain ending that leaves us hanging. It also seems that Rob is controlled by his cock. I can't fathom why he would have gotten back with Trina after several other lies on her part? She cheated on their relationship repeatedly with her old "flame" yet she and Rob had an understanding of exclusivity. It's like putting on an engagement ring -- living with someone, sharing expenses, sleeping together every night . . . after a number of years it would be a common-law marriage, and as far as I'm concerned, saying you love someone, saying you want to be with them all the time, and living the part means exclusivity unless discussed ahead of time to be otherwise. Trina wanted the stability and security of Rob and the love of her old boyfriend from school -- I think that's called having your cake and eating it too -- and this is like the cliche of "it's just sex, honey, get over it" we hear from a cheater. Or, looked at another way, we are bending the definition a bit when this story is put in the LW category -- Trina is not a wife, though she obviously would like to be. At least Rob stood up for himself and called a spade a spade at the end. Thanks for writing.
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Anonymous10/18/09
Where's the ending?
Fairly well written as usual JPB, but like your last posting an ending to the story seems to be lacking. Without one giving closure to the story, you really can't rate the story any higher than I have.
This character taken from JPB own life and his own ability to his Brainis is totally Unsympathetic. I was actually
HOPING trina got him to marry her and fucked him over the Divorce.
No one loves stupid people Rob. 8 years of George W Bush should of made that clear by now.
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Anonymous10/18/09
Usually I agree with Harry but George W was
better than what came before him and seems to be better than that that followed.
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Anonymous10/18/09
Hey, this was a good story...
Here's the deal -- to write a good story you need a plot. This one had a reasonable plot: an unfaithful girlfriend. The pacing of the story was good as well. There was the requisite roller coaster ride of ups (he is happy with her) and downs (he doesn't want anything to do with her).
To second guess the author and say that what the protagonist did was illogical is subjectively petty. He fell in lust and maybe in love. He fell out of love, only to allow "little head" trump his "big head." And, finally, he did it a third and final time.
He may have some open questions, but that what just rhetorical musing by the protagonist for the benefit of the reader. In his heart of hearts he already knows the answers.
Good story, Bob. I spent a year in Michigan in and around the same area. It is fun to read the names of cities and certain streets that I had driven.
He was lucky though. If he had married her he would have
had to divorce her sooner or later. I can understand how he could be enthralled by her and her gorgeous and really sexy manners, but he knew enough to not consider marrying her.
He really should have used a condom with her, and if she complained,---- just tell her, "he was not taking any more risks". That, of course, should provided a closed ending.
What is the difference between his relationship with Amy and his relationship with Trish? The second one was a lot more fun! If it was stupid, at least he had a lot of tail...
....you agree with Harry,- says it all.When Harry is right(sober?)- he is right on. But not "usually".So I can understand the inability to grasp the incompetent idiocy of the Bush Administration.-pistolpackinpete
In real life I'd have dealt with it differently, just as would all the other posters but, as has been said before, it's JPB's story so he can lead it where he will.
I have to hope that over time, I learn something. How to change brakes. How to teach my son to throw a football properly. How to give my daughters advice on dealing with boys and men.
So why is it so different for someone to learn how not to be a cheater. ("Gee...I DON'T have to lie and I DON'T have to find and fuck someone else") One would think that learning how to be specifically inactive like that would be EASIER to learn.
So...while I do look askance at the main character, I can't really blame him. Trina...then six months...then Trina...and then a couple years and Trina again.
How much did you change in two years from college?
But some people just don't seem to want to learn...and at least he kept his eyes open both times. But it's a well documented fact that flaccid empty balls cause vision problems, sad to say.
Unfortunately in Hungary the husband must pay after all children which were born in the marriage after divorce. However according to the USA federal family law the exhusband does not have to pay any children suppoort money if the bastards (Not DNA test proof children) are below 4 years old after divorce. THIS IS THE BIGGEST ROMANTIC REVENGE STORY SITUATION, WHEN THE EXWIFE SHOULD BRING UP CHILDREN ALONE AND THE EXHUSBAND BRINGS UP HIS DNA TEST PROOF CHILDREN IN THE SECOND MARRIAGE AND THEY LIVES IN SAME MIDDLE TOWN..............What a pity the revenge story Authors use this seldom!
Trina and Rob seem congenitally stupid. Trina is unable to choose between Rob and an ex- boyfriend whom her own mother calls "no account". Rob has caught Trina with the ex-bf twice when supposedly in a relationship with Trina and swallows her guff each time. Fool me once shame on you etc etc.
I think Sweetie's explanation of being with Martin is plausible. (Almost certainly not true, but we readers have more information than Fiancé did at that time!). In other words, the second time was just a continuation of the first time, because Fiancé kicked he out of her/his place. Why she would still be living with her (ex)friend after six months is tough to totally swallow, but her story was good (especially if Trina were better in the sack than Amy!)
Don't quite understand how she could be regularly screwing ( 'no-count loser) Martin if he was now living a hundred or more miles away! He doesn't sound like he has the resources to drive to her 3-4 days a week, and she doesn't have the time and still be cleaning Fiancé's clock a lot!
No woman fucks good enough to be worth the heartburn that Trina causes and Rob is terminally stupid for continually buying into her drivel. She wants to fuck, oblige but give her absolutely nothing else. Considering marriage with such a lying tramp is insanity. Rob is too gullible to make the story interesting.
Rob's a masochist.
Thought I was reading a version of Groundhog Day for a moment.
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Anonymous04/21/15
Well
At least the dummy called mom to invite her to a wedding and got the wake-up call he constantly hated to think about.
A masochist...maybe...but just hopelessly stuck on her and looking for excuses to have her.
I give him credit for walking away twice but the poor guy had it bad for her. Unfortunately, he'll have feelings for her for the rest of his life and it will be difficult for him to finally fall in total love with another woman...so - good luck and - thanks to momma!
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Anonymous05/06/15
scary and sad
the scary thing about the story is there are people like him in the story that does it over and over again. they keep saying "oh he will change" or oh she's serious this time. It's sad really. it best to let go even if it is the person u love because u will be pull down and drown in a hell and never get out.
1. Fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me, fool me thrice proves that I am indeed a fool!
2. Her behavior is so extreme, she has to be a pathological liar. That means she is a full on sociopath with no "feelings" for anyone but herself. Her only concern is the power she can wield over others. In this case, it is pussy power over men.
3. He would have seen her personality disorder. They cannot help it and they are not all that good at faking being decent human beings for long. That is why they are known to go from one relationship to another as they burn through people.
I'm not one to scream, "FTDS" at every story that leaves a few loose ends, and I don't need a final confrontation here, as I certainly HOPE that he and Trina are through!
But to leave hanging on who the father is? That's not right!
English
So where's the ending?
A story that long and stopping it on a "I'm not sure of the outcome" note it NOT an ending. If you're gonna repost these things, at least make a fucking reason for doing so like finishing the fucking story.
JPB hate endings
I think it´s his way to make a revenge against his bad luck(3 failed marriages, right?) in your own life(something like the best ending is still to come).
Well....
Easy come, easy go, doesn't matter as long as the cheatin' one goes.
How do you fuck a bitch that has been pumped up
somewhere else? Hell the time in the restaurant I would have told her I knew about her and her brush cut mustache guy and laffed in her face. On the other end of the coin you write a lot of stories. To many stories to make typos, spelling errors, and grammar errors. Take the line. "I made it clear to him that all we were ever going to be was friends." This one of a few I caught in the story and some of them were bad enough to yank me off the train of throught. Spell check doesnt work when you spell the wrong word right. Get a proofreader or good editor.
Good story well planned and interesting
I enjoyed reading the story, it was fast paced and told a lot of story in a short time. well done and thanks
The ending
I will vote on this when you finish it!
Better than your last posting . . .
This one was not bad, fairly well-written, but it suffers from the already-mentioned (by other readers) weak and uncertain ending that leaves us hanging. It also seems that Rob is controlled by his cock. I can't fathom why he would have gotten back with Trina after several other lies on her part? She cheated on their relationship repeatedly with her old "flame" yet she and Rob had an understanding of exclusivity. It's like putting on an engagement ring -- living with someone, sharing expenses, sleeping together every night . . . after a number of years it would be a common-law marriage, and as far as I'm concerned, saying you love someone, saying you want to be with them all the time, and living the part means exclusivity unless discussed ahead of time to be otherwise. Trina wanted the stability and security of Rob and the love of her old boyfriend from school -- I think that's called having your cake and eating it too -- and this is like the cliche of "it's just sex, honey, get over it" we hear from a cheater. Or, looked at another way, we are bending the definition a bit when this story is put in the LW category -- Trina is not a wife, though she obviously would like to be. At least Rob stood up for himself and called a spade a spade at the end. Thanks for writing.
Where's the ending?
Fairly well written as usual JPB, but like your last posting an ending to the story seems to be lacking. Without one giving closure to the story, you really can't rate the story any higher than I have.
Being Pathetically Stupid isnt good
This character taken from JPB own life and his own ability to his Brainis is totally Unsympathetic. I was actually
HOPING trina got him to marry her and fucked him over the Divorce.
No one loves stupid people Rob. 8 years of George W Bush should of made that clear by now.
Usually I agree with Harry but George W was
better than what came before him and seems to be better than that that followed.
Hey, this was a good story...
Here's the deal -- to write a good story you need a plot. This one had a reasonable plot: an unfaithful girlfriend. The pacing of the story was good as well. There was the requisite roller coaster ride of ups (he is happy with her) and downs (he doesn't want anything to do with her).
To second guess the author and say that what the protagonist did was illogical is subjectively petty. He fell in lust and maybe in love. He fell out of love, only to allow "little head" trump his "big head." And, finally, he did it a third and final time.
He may have some open questions, but that what just rhetorical musing by the protagonist for the benefit of the reader. In his heart of hearts he already knows the answers.
Good story, Bob. I spent a year in Michigan in and around the same area. It is fun to read the names of cities and certain streets that I had driven.
John.
Fine Story
He was lucky though. If he had married her he would have
had to divorce her sooner or later. I can understand how he could be enthralled by her and her gorgeous and really sexy manners, but he knew enough to not consider marrying her.
He really should have used a condom with her, and if she complained,---- just tell her, "he was not taking any more risks". That, of course, should provided a closed ending.
What is the difference between his relationship with Amy and his relationship with Trish? The second one was a lot more fun! If it was stupid, at least he had a lot of tail...
Rightagain, Harry
Nothing else to say.
.
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"Usually".....
....you agree with Harry,- says it all.When Harry is right(sober?)- he is right on. But not "usually".So I can understand the inability to grasp the incompetent idiocy of the Bush Administration.-pistolpackinpete
gave it a 4
fuck that bitch and move on. let her raise it alone
A sad story.
Nobody wins.
Well enough written to make me feel it.
In real life I'd have dealt with it differently, just as would all the other posters but, as has been said before, it's JPB's story so he can lead it where he will.
ONE, TWO, THREE TIMES
a sucker,will there be a 4th. TK U MLJ LV NV
As a human being
I have to hope that over time, I learn something. How to change brakes. How to teach my son to throw a football properly. How to give my daughters advice on dealing with boys and men.
So why is it so different for someone to learn how not to be a cheater. ("Gee...I DON'T have to lie and I DON'T have to find and fuck someone else") One would think that learning how to be specifically inactive like that would be EASIER to learn.
So...while I do look askance at the main character, I can't really blame him. Trina...then six months...then Trina...and then a couple years and Trina again.
How much did you change in two years from college?
But some people just don't seem to want to learn...and at least he kept his eyes open both times. But it's a well documented fact that flaccid empty balls cause vision problems, sad to say.
Good romantic revenge situation
Unfortunately in Hungary the husband must pay after all children which were born in the marriage after divorce. However according to the USA federal family law the exhusband does not have to pay any children suppoort money if the bastards (Not DNA test proof children) are below 4 years old after divorce. THIS IS THE BIGGEST ROMANTIC REVENGE STORY SITUATION, WHEN THE EXWIFE SHOULD BRING UP CHILDREN ALONE AND THE EXHUSBAND BRINGS UP HIS DNA TEST PROOF CHILDREN IN THE SECOND MARRIAGE AND THEY LIVES IN SAME MIDDLE TOWN..............What a pity the revenge story Authors use this seldom!
How 'Bout That
So Rob is a three-time loser. With the same girl. At least he found out the truth in the end. Not a great story but interesting.
Both
Trina and Rob seem congenitally stupid. Trina is unable to choose between Rob and an ex- boyfriend whom her own mother calls "no account". Rob has caught Trina with the ex-bf twice when supposedly in a relationship with Trina and swallows her guff each time. Fool me once shame on you etc etc.
Good for u jpb.
Well this comment was easy to formulate
Rob is a DUMBASS.
I vote for 2
I think Sweetie's explanation of being with Martin is plausible. (Almost certainly not true, but we readers have more information than Fiancé did at that time!). In other words, the second time was just a continuation of the first time, because Fiancé kicked he out of her/his place. Why she would still be living with her (ex)friend after six months is tough to totally swallow, but her story was good (especially if Trina were better in the sack than Amy!)
Don't quite understand how she could be regularly screwing ( 'no-count loser) Martin if he was now living a hundred or more miles away! He doesn't sound like he has the resources to drive to her 3-4 days a week, and she doesn't have the time and still be cleaning Fiancé's clock a lot!
finish it
only a 1 until it is done.
No woman fucks good enough to be worth the heartburn that Trina causes and Rob is terminally stupid for continually buying into her drivel. She wants to fuck, oblige but give her absolutely nothing else. Considering marriage with such a lying tramp is insanity. Rob is too gullible to make the story interesting.
HOW MANY WHACKS ON THE HEAD MUST YOU ENDURE
and now its a possible guillotine for the coup-de-gras...TK U MLJ LV NV
what a dumbass
this story reminds me of the fable about a scorpion trying to cross a river. why cany some people learn from their mistakes.
{~;
Perfect comment mike I couldn't have siad it better
THE OLD FASHION LINE
Mama Baby---Daddy Maybe...TK U MLJ LV NV
****
Rob's a masochist.
Thought I was reading a version of Groundhog Day for a moment.
Well
At least the dummy called mom to invite her to a wedding and got the wake-up call he constantly hated to think about.
A masochist...maybe...but just hopelessly stuck on her and looking for excuses to have her.
I give him credit for walking away twice but the poor guy had it bad for her. Unfortunately, he'll have feelings for her for the rest of his life and it will be difficult for him to finally fall in total love with another woman...so - good luck and - thanks to momma!
scary and sad
the scary thing about the story is there are people like him in the story that does it over and over again. they keep saying "oh he will change" or oh she's serious this time. It's sad really. it best to let go even if it is the person u love because u will be pull down and drown in a hell and never get out.
They Say Write About What You Know
Damn but you divulged. Thank you for your candor.
A Few Things
1. Fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me, fool me thrice proves that I am indeed a fool!
2. Her behavior is so extreme, she has to be a pathological liar. That means she is a full on sociopath with no "feelings" for anyone but herself. Her only concern is the power she can wield over others. In this case, it is pussy power over men.
3. He would have seen her personality disorder. They cannot help it and they are not all that good at faking being decent human beings for long. That is why they are known to go from one relationship to another as they burn through people.
Finish?
I'm not one to scream, "FTDS" at every story that leaves a few loose ends, and I don't need a final confrontation here, as I certainly HOPE that he and Trina are through!
But to leave hanging on who the father is? That's not right!
Amy
“We didn't date, go out to dinner or go bowling or dancing” – Just because you’re “fuck buddies”, or FWB’s doesn’t mean you can’t go out!
@sbrooks103 04/24/16
re:
Amy
“We didn't date, go out to dinner or go bowling or dancing” – Just because you’re “fuck buddies”, or FWB’s doesn’t mean you can’t go out!
Fuck-buddies just get together for sex.
Friends with benefits on the other hand are friends who do the normal things that friends do together plus have sex with each other .
@sbrooks103 04/24/16
re:
Finish?
He never heard from her again.
Most likely reason?
The child was obviously Martin Keller's.
The man in the story is apparently a slow learner
Scotty had a saying:
Fool me once, shame on you.
Fool me twice, shame on me.
If there was a third verse, it may go: Fool me three times, then I'm a fucking idiot.
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