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by Sean Renaud

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Proofreeding Would Make This Even Better

This story isn't bad, but really needs proofreading. There are several spots which need commas to set off interjections (like "yeah") and phrases. "Spin" is used when "spine" is obviously intended and "waistband" is one word -- these are mistakes spellcheck won't catch. Overall, a decent idea which needs some polish.

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