Agree, this story sucked 3 years ago & still does!
Writing for your own satisfaction is your choice, JPB. Commenting on your usual 98.9% wimp dogshit is our choice. The story sucks and your a typical fucked up idiot 98.9% of the time in your pathetic efforts and recycled bullshit. Try again, please because it is always entertaining to address such silliness. Your 1.9% non-wimp fan.
You can't just leave us hanging, there has to be another chapter, at least I hope so. Good story, good read, good flow, even if some don't like it, your story was well done. Thanks for the work.
This story rocks! We'll ignore the possible charges against him (discharge of a firearm within city limits, assault and attempted murder when he fired a bullet towards his wife -- just try that one in New York sometime). Of course, the macho stuff is fantasy but it's a nice fantasy (for a guy, anyway). More of these, please.
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Anonymous10/24/09
O.K.
But not finished.
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Anonymous10/24/09
Have to agree
the story is not finished...
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Anonymous10/24/09
Fine story ending like most of JPB's work
I enjoyed your story. I read the comments for your stories first to be sure it is not one of your wimp or (in my opinion) gross stories. I liked the character development for both the husband and wife and I liked the ending at the bar. For those comments about it being unfinished, this is as good as it gets for JPB, actually it is better than most! This site has a "help us improve" going on. I've suggested that they ban commentors who indulge in personal attacks. Why even bother reading his work if you know you don't like it? I don't. Thanks JPB for your story, Ttom.
While not (read almost never) a proponent of terminal violence against a woman, I am in this case. This womans genes should be permanently removed from the gene pool.
In years past, the four would be given a dirt blanket and hubby could then find a mate who was prepared to be in a relationship.
The story needs closure.
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Anonymous10/24/09
Well Vulcan as always some of your comments are
off of center. Firing a firearm in a city. Since when is defending yourself a criminal act. It is their word against his and after being forcibly subdued and criminally detained and the tricks his wife pulled, he as in fear of his life. They came into the room where he was and treatened him and he fired a warning shot when he feared for his life. It's their word against his and my friends he is the victim. I am afraid besides the divorce actions I would have filed charges against all four of the criminals that assualted him in his own home. Ohio may be one of the weird states but most states allow a person to retain a firearm in their home for self defense. Of course some states and politically correct individuals dont want you to be able to defend yourself because the real victim is the poor criminal that is robbing you or attempting to kill you and you should be the innocent lamb to slaughter. I like Texas old law that basically said, if you catch your wife and a man in the act you can shoot both of them but cant take time to plan or organize it. Wow, with the right firearm you could take them both out with one shot!
but this story has been posted (on another site)about a year ago and there is no sequel yet. JPB's style is to set up these situations (of course another author can e-mail him to write a sequel). If there is a reconciliation in the sequel it will be a hard sell. Betsy on a flimsy basis went out to recruit 3 guys to hold Rob down while she gets fucked probably repeatedly by the 3 men. These three strangers could have done anything to them and as Ben stated there would be little legally they could do about it. Betsy is just crazy so the sooner Rob gets away from her the better. One of the things I like about JPB stories is that there is a wide range of characters and situations. If Rob had been a wimp then the couple could have became sexually dominated by Ben. If Rob had escaped and Betsy was then raped Rob could track the 3 men down to get revenge. If Rob had let them have their way with her then...(INSERT) JPB - Thanks for interesting and different stories!
It is impossible to figure out what negative people are complaining about. Did they want it to go on until something that they could reject happened or they could officially label it boring? Really if JPB was not the author more of you would like it..
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Anonymous10/24/09
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Anonymous10/24/09
Well
He should have shot the whore and all those goddamned motherfuckers
Gawd - I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!!!! Please do not write any wimp out sequels.
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Anonymous10/25/09
A lousy story Bob!
What the fuck was this supposed to be? How the fuck does a reasonable person get so fucked up and bent out of shape with no discernable proof? If she loved him, wouldn't she have asked him first? And if he loved her, wouldn't he have tried some romance instead of yelling?
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Anonymous10/27/09
needs more
This story actually lends itself to more. Don't leave your fans hanging.
doorknob or dwarnock, or whatever yer called, you are a complete ass
not extreme enough.
breaking of trust is breaking of vows. as well the minute she got nikked with the guys....infidelity. it dont pass the boyfreind test therefor it is cheating. cheaters always cheat and in the long run kharma is a bitch LOL
go back to yer sloppy wife dwarnock and eat the slimy stinky ropes of many mens semen out of her ugly stretched fuckhole. thats all yer good for you looser. you give men a bad name. yer probably a cheating woman tryin to give yer kind some kind of legitimacy. HAH!
not a bad story bud, a little better than your usual. really liked the ending.....except would have liked to see the ex hear that. about her almost gangbang. maybe she wont cheat on the next man(ya right!! LOL 99.8% chance she would do it again.....but im a romantic....and i cqn hope! LOL)
She was a fool, also she was looking to fuck around. Whatever she got she deserved, and more. Fuck her and the horse she rode in on (but with someone else's dick!)
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Anonymous09/19/14
Should've
Should've bounced the bitch to the curb when she killed the tv. That act was too psychotic to be considered normal behavior. She would most likely kill him in his sleep.
English
Dammit!.....
lack of communication?... Good story JPB
story sucked shit 3 years ago
still does.
A real tight story
Fast and to the point, good story, thanks
Author, I smell a dirty rat
A click of the mouse should get rid of it.
Agree, this story sucked 3 years ago & still does!
Writing for your own satisfaction is your choice, JPB. Commenting on your usual 98.9% wimp dogshit is our choice. The story sucks and your a typical fucked up idiot 98.9% of the time in your pathetic efforts and recycled bullshit. Try again, please because it is always entertaining to address such silliness. Your 1.9% non-wimp fan.
Where's the rest of the story
You can't just leave us hanging, there has to be another chapter, at least I hope so. Good story, good read, good flow, even if some don't like it, your story was well done. Thanks for the work.
Once in a while, a story has testosterone . . .
This story rocks! We'll ignore the possible charges against him (discharge of a firearm within city limits, assault and attempted murder when he fired a bullet towards his wife -- just try that one in New York sometime). Of course, the macho stuff is fantasy but it's a nice fantasy (for a guy, anyway). More of these, please.
O.K.
But not finished.
Have to agree
the story is not finished...
Fine story ending like most of JPB's work
I enjoyed your story. I read the comments for your stories first to be sure it is not one of your wimp or (in my opinion) gross stories. I liked the character development for both the husband and wife and I liked the ending at the bar. For those comments about it being unfinished, this is as good as it gets for JPB, actually it is better than most! This site has a "help us improve" going on. I've suggested that they ban commentors who indulge in personal attacks. Why even bother reading his work if you know you don't like it? I don't. Thanks JPB for your story, Ttom.
What's Next?
While not (read almost never) a proponent of terminal violence against a woman, I am in this case. This womans genes should be permanently removed from the gene pool.
In years past, the four would be given a dirt blanket and hubby could then find a mate who was prepared to be in a relationship.
The story needs closure.
Well Vulcan as always some of your comments are
off of center. Firing a firearm in a city. Since when is defending yourself a criminal act. It is their word against his and after being forcibly subdued and criminally detained and the tricks his wife pulled, he as in fear of his life. They came into the room where he was and treatened him and he fired a warning shot when he feared for his life. It's their word against his and my friends he is the victim. I am afraid besides the divorce actions I would have filed charges against all four of the criminals that assualted him in his own home. Ohio may be one of the weird states but most states allow a person to retain a firearm in their home for self defense. Of course some states and politically correct individuals dont want you to be able to defend yourself because the real victim is the poor criminal that is robbing you or attempting to kill you and you should be the innocent lamb to slaughter. I like Texas old law that basically said, if you catch your wife and a man in the act you can shoot both of them but cant take time to plan or organize it. Wow, with the right firearm you could take them both out with one shot!
The Future?
I hope there is a sequel. This story needs finishing,perhaps reconsiliation.
Commenters: Hate to break it to you...
but this story has been posted (on another site)about a year ago and there is no sequel yet. JPB's style is to set up these situations (of course another author can e-mail him to write a sequel). If there is a reconciliation in the sequel it will be a hard sell. Betsy on a flimsy basis went out to recruit 3 guys to hold Rob down while she gets fucked probably repeatedly by the 3 men. These three strangers could have done anything to them and as Ben stated there would be little legally they could do about it. Betsy is just crazy so the sooner Rob gets away from her the better. One of the things I like about JPB stories is that there is a wide range of characters and situations. If Rob had been a wimp then the couple could have became sexually dominated by Ben. If Rob had escaped and Betsy was then raped Rob could track the 3 men down to get revenge. If Rob had let them have their way with her then...(INSERT) JPB - Thanks for interesting and different stories!
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It looks like a good consequences story
It is impossible to figure out what negative people are complaining about. Did they want it to go on until something that they could reject happened or they could officially label it boring? Really if JPB was not the author more of you would like it..
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Well
He should have shot the whore and all those goddamned motherfuckers
Great Story (Then & Now)
Gawd - I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!!!! Please do not write any wimp out sequels.
A lousy story Bob!
What the fuck was this supposed to be? How the fuck does a reasonable person get so fucked up and bent out of shape with no discernable proof? If she loved him, wouldn't she have asked him first? And if he loved her, wouldn't he have tried some romance instead of yelling?
needs more
This story actually lends itself to more. Don't leave your fans hanging.
The Ending is perfect.
You don't need to write another word.
Shame, that it cost the husband half of everything because of a little slut wife.
Every cuckolded man should be allowed retribution.
Unrealistic and too extreme
I gave it a 3.
The divorce doesn't matter. The marrage is like dating. They are both young. If it doesn't work out they find someone else.
doorknob or dwarnock, or whatever yer called, you are a complete ass
not extreme enough.
breaking of trust is breaking of vows. as well the minute she got nikked with the guys....infidelity. it dont pass the boyfreind test therefor it is cheating. cheaters always cheat and in the long run kharma is a bitch LOL
go back to yer sloppy wife dwarnock and eat the slimy stinky ropes of many mens semen out of her ugly stretched fuckhole. thats all yer good for you looser. you give men a bad name. yer probably a cheating woman tryin to give yer kind some kind of legitimacy. HAH!
not a bad story bud, a little better than your usual. really liked the ending.....except would have liked to see the ex hear that. about her almost gangbang. maybe she wont cheat on the next man(ya right!! LOL 99.8% chance she would do it again.....but im a romantic....and i cqn hope! LOL)
Good Read Bob!!
Your story your ending. Thanks for sharing.
CHECK THE SCORE BOARD
down 1 TV and out 1 shrew of a mate. TK U MLJ LV NV
FIVE STARS (It would not take)
She was a fool, also she was looking to fuck around. Whatever she got she deserved, and more. Fuck her and the horse she rode in on (but with someone else's dick!)
Should've
Should've bounced the bitch to the curb when she killed the tv. That act was too psychotic to be considered normal behavior. She would most likely kill him in his sleep.
Damn
That cunt was fucking nuts. She got what she deserved.
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