Oh Baby

crap

yea, the story was relatively well written, but i didnt like the fact that for a person "so in love", it was that easy to sleep with someone else and not just that, but to get preggers. and her holier than thou sister encouraged her to do it and now it seems they will get away with it. this seems like it could possibly happen but then theyd have to be retarded and anyway, could you write a second part where steve finds out what she did? maybe im an asshole, but it pissed me what she did and i want it out in the open. personally id divorce her because what she did was terrible-this isnt a male ego or pride thing either you dbags- but since a lot of authors like a couple to stay together, i guess youd prob do that

Big Holes

One, this woman is not madly in love with her husband, just herself, two, if D.N.A. testing was done than Steve either knows the baby isn't his and doesn't care and is a big wimp cockold or the baby is his and she fucked around just cause she wanted too, either way this is a story about cheating. Perhaps in the next story she finds out the reason Steve takes a lover at work after the test results were explained to him when he got them.

Seems the implications are that he actually was

the fathers baby inspite of trying to have another man's baby. Women like this are nuts. They confuse love, with childbearing, with any sperm donor will do. They see nothing really wrong in adultry and betrayal of the husband and the marriage. Both of these sisters are nuts. Neither should be parents. Taken a step further. DNA results from two actual brothers would be very close and mixed with the mothers DNA very hard to separate. Good story loose on actual data.

Not a good story.

The trouble with this story is I can see wives doing it this way and not caring who the father is just the fact that they have a squawling puke and crap machine in their house. It's one thing for the husband to know what is going on but to NOT tell him and to make love to the sperm donor? Sorry this woman does not love her husband all she cares about is what is inside her womb.

What a bitch

She is really lucky her husband is the father - she should be chucked out on her ass - then again, even a whore can be lucky, deserved or not.
I feel sorry for hubby - he's being fooled to think he has a good wife.

Cool It

Most of your critics are being dogmatic. Yes, Carol wanted a baby, but she said she wanted it, not just for herself, but also to please the man she loved totally. She also had told her sister that she did not think she would be able to have one, but did not seek an alternative. Her sister put the idea into her head, and she moved with it. Yes, she enjoyed it, but seemed to be firm that it would not happen again and resumed her loving with Steve. Some women do have a stong biological need to become mothers and Carol seems like someone who could do this and truly still love Steve.

Of course women like this are nuts..

because they don't fucking exist... except in the minds of mentally disturbed writers who have absolutely no concept of what a loving wife or what is erotic. hoochinya, you chose to invest your time and energy into writing a story that is ONLY ABOUT PAIN, BETRAYAL, HUMILIATION, AND SELFISH DISGUSTING BEHAVOIR. Your readers are to believe that the wife, the sister, and the brother are all willing do one of the most hateful and disgusting things you can do to anyone on this planet... they are all mentally disturbed and willing to literally risk legal action and most likely immediate death when the husband finds out. So Author, why would your readers beleive this, why would we buy into this crap... I mean you took the time to make it even remotely beleivable by making sure we knew that the brothers hated each other, and that the sister wanted to end her sister's marriage, and that the wife was a moron... right? Oh, no, that's right, YOURE TOO FUCKING LAZY TO PUT ANY THOUGHT INTO YOUR CRAP POSTING! So you just decided to completely randomingly change everyone's personality and baeavoir on the fly, so that all you acheive with your story is to really annoy and piss off your readers. So, do you feel good, feel like you gained something here? What was it you got out of this? You let us all know that you're a little stupid, and that you have no concept of basic human psycholgy and behavoir and that although you've never met anyone in your entire life that did anything like this at all... you think it's a good fantasy anyways? Why? have you asked yourself what it wrong with you? Have you looked at your own life and figured out why you have no healthy relationships?, no good sex life? maybe that is where you should invest your energy instead of here.

Good story and good storyline

Well written and interesting. Well done erotic sex is always good to read. Thanks

Fatdaddybitch loved it

Did it make your little dick hard thinking about a wife letting her hubbie think he had a faithfull wife and a son while his brother laughed at him. Ya, thats hot. His brothers D.N.A. close enough hubbie was fooled, brother won't stop and neither will wife, no happy ending.

Hay Cool It

How would you feel if you found out you wife got pregnant by shacking up at your house in your bed. Think that would be O.K. sure it would.

Clever and witty

The story was certainly quirky and clever, but not really satisfying.

YOU CERTAINLY DONT MAKE THE ENDING CLEAR.....

WAS IT STEVES OR KARLS BABY

it was steves baby

ok, cheat, pregnant, his child

and in the end she is just a cheating slut that confessed to a priest instead of her husband

Started off well

Started off good but I was left unconvinced - she loved her husband so much but then had an affair with his brother at the drop of a hat? As a reader I need a bit more convincing, a bit more depth and build-up I think? Good descriptions tho :)

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These stories never make much sense to me. Even if we get rid of all the other solutions there is still one way a woman can get pregnant without having sex. All you have to do is have the man ejaculate externally and have the woman push it inside of her. Andrei Chikatilo, the infamous Soviet serial killer, did this with his wife in order for her to become pregnant. But then I guess if they did it that way we wouldn't have all this drama would we?