God I hope you will continue writing this story. I enjoyed reading it.
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Anonymous11/11/09
Why do.....
Why do some of you even read these if all you are going to do is run the writer down.! At least he writes and we read and you people most likely can't do either of these, why don't you experts go get a few Comic's and sit down and enjoy.? Really a good story and gave you a '5' & a 100.! Keep on writing and for those of us who like to read will read your stories.!! Thanks. JAG/TSO
The only negative thing I have to say is the over use of the phrase "Little brother." Other than that I thought the story was well done. I would like to read about how they spent the time being snowed in and how their love flourished.Thanks for the good story
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Anonymous04/04/10
editor?
are sure you used an editor if so they are not very good you better find a GOOD editor this one isn't worth the time they spent on this story
I don't understand the bit about the pill. Leave that off and I give the story a 5 instead of a 3.
Adding a dirty trick does not make the story more enjoyable.
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Anonymous12/08/12
Follow-on please
Can we have the next chapter please? I'd like to read about them taking care of their deformed, mentally retarded baby. Six fingers are so much more useful than five - don't you think?
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Anonymous12/18/12
not good at all
no background to tell what their relationship was like before this, to much teasing and an unrealistic rush to sex. the editing if you can call it that sucked big time the idiot that edited this should be banned for life to many wrong words, missing words etc. this needs a total rewrite using a GOOD EDITOR not a grade school drop out.
No background info on previous encounters, just unbelievable crap. The reader is left searching for even a hint of reality between these two but sadly it's not there.
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More.
God I hope you will continue writing this story. I enjoyed reading it.
Why do.....
Why do some of you even read these if all you are going to do is run the writer down.! At least he writes and we read and you people most likely can't do either of these, why don't you experts go get a few Comic's and sit down and enjoy.? Really a good story and gave you a '5' & a 100.! Keep on writing and for those of us who like to read will read your stories.!! Thanks. JAG/TSO
very erotic and loving
The only negative thing I have to say is the over use of the phrase "Little brother." Other than that I thought the story was well done. I would like to read about how they spent the time being snowed in and how their love flourished.Thanks for the good story
editor?
are sure you used an editor if so they are not very good you better find a GOOD editor this one isn't worth the time they spent on this story
wow!
Awesome story!
WHY?
I don't understand the bit about the pill. Leave that off and I give the story a 5 instead of a 3.
Adding a dirty trick does not make the story more enjoyable.
Follow-on please
Can we have the next chapter please? I'd like to read about them taking care of their deformed, mentally retarded baby. Six fingers are so much more useful than five - don't you think?
not good at all
no background to tell what their relationship was like before this, to much teasing and an unrealistic rush to sex. the editing if you can call it that sucked big time the idiot that edited this should be banned for life to many wrong words, missing words etc. this needs a total rewrite using a GOOD EDITOR not a grade school drop out.
Stupid inanity!!
No background info on previous encounters, just unbelievable crap. The reader is left searching for even a hint of reality between these two but sadly it's not there.
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