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Villanelle No. 1, To My Lover

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by Anonymous

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by SweetOblivion11/09/09

Very cute

and well scanned too - worthy of a smile and light applause in attending your next effort. Sweet O.

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by EroticOrogeny11/09/09

Nice job

Villanelle flows nicely, with repeated lines not being blatant. One question - don't see why need to put parentheses around 5th stanza

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by foehn211/11/09

Very nice work.

I think there is a typo in the second line of the third stanza, but in general, the Villanelle is one of the hardest forms to master, and this effort is worthy of comparison to Thomas Dylan, Theodore Roethke, and others who have achieved fame. Fame is fleeting, and capricious, of course. But a poem like this one will last forever.

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