Definately hot hot and hot. Why couldn't that happen to me? I sure there'll be a ch. 2 and can't wait to read that one too. Your story doesn't have all the descriptive words used by far to many other authors; trying to make the story as nasty and vulgar as possible. A person doesn't need all that bull shit to make a story erotic, sexy, and a huge turn-on if you know what I mean. I'm not saying don't use specific words like cunt, cock, pussy, cum, things like that, but you use them to make a point, not just to hammer the reader with them. Your story is natural and far more believable and a pleasure to read. Keep up the good work. You are definately a favorite.
This is a well written story that is extremely sexual. I would only hope that the author will continue with this couple and tell the rest of their story. Thanks
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Anonymous09/22/10
didn't finish
i stopped when she went back to his room no girl sister or not would go back they would just go home maybe in a few days or weeks she might write or email him but she sure wouldn't go back not to many good bro sis incest stories worth reading here anymore
It was a great story and who in the hell was that person before me? He needs to learn to at least write a correct sentence before complaining!
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Anonymous11/21/13
typical waste of time
you rushed this so much it wasn't funny. as said by another no way in hell would she go back that day. i agree it would take several days before she emailed him she sure wouldn't want to see him or talk to him. delete it and rewrite it making it more realistic.
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Wow
Definately hot hot and hot. Why couldn't that happen to me? I sure there'll be a ch. 2 and can't wait to read that one too. Your story doesn't have all the descriptive words used by far to many other authors; trying to make the story as nasty and vulgar as possible. A person doesn't need all that bull shit to make a story erotic, sexy, and a huge turn-on if you know what I mean. I'm not saying don't use specific words like cunt, cock, pussy, cum, things like that, but you use them to make a point, not just to hammer the reader with them. Your story is natural and far more believable and a pleasure to read. Keep up the good work. You are definately a favorite.
What a sweet tale...
That was a sweet read, and I mean that in the older use of sweet. It had heart as well as hard.
Great Read
It's been a long time since I've read a story that reads as well as this one. I hope the story continues!!!
lucky guy
wish i had a sister like her.. !! =(
A really erotic start to a beautiful relationship
This is a well written story that is extremely sexual. I would only hope that the author will continue with this couple and tell the rest of their story. Thanks
didn't finish
i stopped when she went back to his room no girl sister or not would go back they would just go home maybe in a few days or weeks she might write or email him but she sure wouldn't go back not to many good bro sis incest stories worth reading here anymore
Good story!
It was a great story and who in the hell was that person before me? He needs to learn to at least write a correct sentence before complaining!
typical waste of time
you rushed this so much it wasn't funny. as said by another no way in hell would she go back that day. i agree it would take several days before she emailed him she sure wouldn't want to see him or talk to him. delete it and rewrite it making it more realistic.
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