All Comments on 'O Brother,O Lover'

wrong area this belongs in the gay,bdsm and nonconsesaul areas not incest loser from now on pick one area and keep your story with in those boundries no mixing and matching readers that don't like gay,bdsm and nonconsensual will not read any more of your stories if you keep mixing and putting them in the wrong areas do a rewrite and move it to the right area

Crap

before attempting to "write" stories. Your's has to be the worst English I have come across with no knowledge of grammar. I stopped reading after about ten lines. Find a new hobby, PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!

I think English has to be his second language.

you really need to edit. don't stop writing. just have your next story checked before you post.

An earlier comment had it right, non-English speaker: check the intro in the author's first story, "Dark Winged Slut" (A better story, I thought, and certainly less offensive to straights such as myself). Author needs strong editing until she develops a command in English writing. In USA, this work might be offered by a 9-11 year-old, writing with some of the vocabulary of a middle-teen.

Better use of the Engliah language would have helped here. So many errors are quite

distracting.

it is a fucking shame to write something like this,fucking shame,shame stupid writer I BETTER STOP WOULD WRITE TOO MUC`............

Nothing but discusting...pure shit...you should be shot...

nothing but pigshit