Rhythm Of The Rain

Very Good!

I like it and it fite the theme well. Always look forward to Jake's invitationals, so many good stories come out. Thanks for a winner!

whats wrong with you?

why do yo always rag on your main character? so hes a spoiled brat because hes honest about how he feels? because he wont put up with the shit his parents give him? because he was pissed about the craptastic "partial break"? i mean, what the fuck is a partial break? they still hang out, grab dinner, but nothing the smells of a relationship? that sounds like th friend zone and from how you described him, he loved her, wanted only her and make his feelings perfectly clear. a partial break is still break up and the "we're moving too fast is bs" and you know it. im glad she didnt date the rival simply to make her ex jealous because then i would have had to stoped reading your crap because i know you would have got them back together and then pulled your usuall stunt in that you always blame the guy. you always say how selfeshm, ungratefull, hard headed, etc he is and then he magically relizes everything is his fault and as soon as he comes to terms with that, he can have his happy ending. im getting real tired of crap like this. do better. please

Yeah woody....

....like the guy below said, why are you always taking responsibility for your behavior? Why don't you blame it on others, isn't that the new "American" way? Jeesh. Oh. you must think love is thinking about and attending to the others needs, putting your own on hold without feeling sorry for yourself.Grow up.Hee Hee-thanks,-pistolpackinpete

I really liked this one

But you really should listen to anon below and his stupid rant. Maybe you will learn to write a brain dead story about a guy who has a least the normal number of human faults and takes no responsibility for anything -- ends up a loser who finally realizes that males who take responsibility grow up to be men while he is still a little boy in a man's body.

Always.....

A great read.

Thnaks.

C

Aplayer who grew up -

Nice and even as a player he had integrity beyond most - he got what he deserved - just barely lolo

love it

you know what is going on but do not describe it. I love it, thank you.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com

when the right one comes along

it can be powerful
and life changing

Why did Shannon let Jake put his arm around her? If she wanted to stop the fight why didn't she take John instead of Jake to the dance floor? You're purposely having your characters make dumb decisions to move the plot.

Yeah

She just seems way to fishy and he toom her back way to easy. Why did she not leave and go find him right away or as other person say take jake to the dance floor.