All Comments on 'Zachary & Ciara Ch. 02'

When I went to hit 5 stars,I accidently hit one star,SORRY.I love this story. Please continue, I hope Emily and Emilee become friends.

i absolutely love this story. i can't wait for chapter 3.

Way to go. This story has so much potential. Waiting for chapter 3 and beyond.

Can't wait for the next chapter. Wondering if I should just lokk for it soon or in about a month? lol Thanks in advance in any event.

I love the overt disapproval from Zach's mom and Abigail. Can't wait to see how it plays out. Worth the wait!

I love your writing style, we are getting to know the friends and family, I can see a lot more stories to come with the 4 best friends. Please don't make us wait for the next Ch.

Please keep this story coming....I cannot wait another month...make it tomorrow and the next day and the next

with one cool chapter!!

...but something that is really bothering me is you said in the story that Zach was getting the first half of his 100 pound inheritence? 100 pounds is nothing are you sure it is not 100 thousand or 100 million pounds? Because that makes more sense...if it was only 100 pounds he would be better off letting that go to charity. That is just my thought on that but otherwise it's a pretty good story and I am enjoying it. Can't wait for chapter 3!!!

love how this story is just building slowly, how zachs friends all seem to be good guys and that the little one may be more than see appears. keep it coming please

love how this story is just building slowly, how zachs friends all seem to be good guys and that the little one may be more than see appears. keep it coming please

I am thrilled to see another chapter in this story. But its to short! I swear i am not a fast reader! No, you wrote it, so its to short.... Ok it went by so fast, and the ending, wow! This was done so well, but some parts seemed mmm rushed. Or maybe more detail in the background, like the chapel that sort. Interesting ending and i hope we get another installment next month, if not sooner! P.S. I hope you continue with your other story as well :)

Mspat thanks so much for the update I've been so looking forward to it. It was simply great and that little Emilee is truly something else I was so now expecting that from her I can't wait to see what is gonna happen next and I hope you will be able to update again really soon thanks and keep up the great writing.

I love this story!!! London, the mother-in-law,and the wannabe wife are going to be a real change from Atlanta for Ciara and Emilee. I'm sure there will be fireworks. People need to stop pre-judging others they don't know.

Please keep the new chapters coming.

~Bluegardenia

It was a long wait but worth it. i love your story.

I'm so glad you continued the story!! FINALLY!!!! Great chapter I can't wait for the continuation!

Truly amazing that Emilee knew something was going to happen to the car and that is the reason that she saved all of them from serious injury. Great story. Thanks

Ms Pat,

Just came across this story tonight. You've done it again with another great story.

Wow, how did sheknow? Glad to see another great story!!!!

I love this story mspat!! I love how his friends have accepted Ciara and Emilee!!

I love the story... I cant wait for the update.

Please write more and soon

Fantastic story.

You always pen great stories.

Please update soon.

I think this is a story that must be continued.

Been waiting for next chapter, really wish you'd continue the story!

Is Emilee psychic? Can't wait for the next update!

EMILEE SAVED THEIR LIVES. THANKS FOR A GREAT READ AND I HOPE THAT YOU WILL UPDATE SOON. THANKS

Is said it all it n the title

Keep up the chapters!!! Whoooo!!!!

I am sure that someone is going to get slapped. I can't stand Abigail or Zach's mother, Emily with a Y. The name can only be spelled one way. Please lady give it a rest. Thanks

What a way to grab the attention of the reader and keep them hanging on until the end is revealed.

I wish you'd get an editor. Not trying to be the annoying one here, but this definitely would be a lot better with some editing. The various mistakes take away from the potential greatness of it.

Loving the plot and characters so far, especially Emilee; she's super adorable, love that kid already. That tad bit of jealously Zach showed when Colin held Ciara's hand had me reeling; he's so gonna fall in love with her. My fave parts were seeing the reaction on Brie's face when she found out her sister was married to her boss, Zach correcting Abigail's introduction of herself, and the sight of Zach's mom overlooking Ciara in search for her daughter-in-law PRICELESS, I was rolling all over the place HAHA I could just see Emily scoping out the place for the mystery woman when she was right in her face. What would be most surprising and absolutely lovely would be Emily falling in love with Emilee and treating her like the grandchild she never had.

The 100 pounds thing, as previously stated, threw me for a loop as well. I hope you meant 100 million pounds or even 100 thousand pounds versus a measly 100 pounds.

ok i'm gonna keep reading because you know what you're doing because you've gotten me hooked. HOWEVER.... i have been seeing a trend in bw-wm lit and they make the bw kind of pathetic and in need of the wm or any man for that matter to save the day and it seems you REALLY took that and ran with it. i understand giving them a back story of struggle but i couldn't help but to roll my eyes a few times.... and crack though? why couldn't it be classier like pills or wine coolers?

I'm hooked. You have a new fan!!!

Wasn't it 50 million then 100 million pounds in the first chapter and now it's 200k?

and interesting way to end the story. Emilee must be special indeed.

Where does Brie fit in with the story about Ciara and her twin, Cara? Brie said that she was the wild one. Wouldn't the drug addicted sister be considered the wild one? Brie was not even mentioned in the story about the family's treatment of Cara.

That's crazy. Emilee is indeed a special little girl and Zach should pull out his pimp hand for his mother and Abigail. Reading on...