When you write bad stories they are really bad, can you kill your self in this, that would be cool, story isn't.
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Anonymous11/23/09
considering her life...
why doesn't she just divorce her husband? As for the tapes...well, the courts take a very dim view of hidden cameras and blackmail and releasing sex tapes to the general public.
Please continue soon, there is a lot of potential in this story.
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Anonymous11/23/09
It gets worse ** Spoiler Alert ***
This is an old story. It's at least a year old -- at least that's the date on the Stories Online version -- but given JPB's MO it's probably older.
So, spoiler alert
She does in fact become a slut. The husband sends a letter asking if she was fucking other guys. She gets pregnant, and doesn't know who the father is. She moves in with the narrator. It turns out the husbands question wasn't accusing, he was hoping she was fucking around -- despite there being nothing to support this concept until then. He was counting on his friend fucking her to open her up. He just wasn't counting on her leaving him. The story ends with her still with the asshole friend, but dating the husband. Even by JPB's criteria, the plot is asinine.
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Anonymous11/24/09
Hey, In The Real World
Thanks for giving us the ending, so now we don't have to keep scanning this crap!
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When you write bad stories they are really bad, can you kill your self in this, that would be cool, story isn't.
considering her life...
why doesn't she just divorce her husband? As for the tapes...well, the courts take a very dim view of hidden cameras and blackmail and releasing sex tapes to the general public.
Thanks
Please continue soon, there is a lot of potential in this story.
It gets worse ** Spoiler Alert ***
This is an old story. It's at least a year old -- at least that's the date on the Stories Online version -- but given JPB's MO it's probably older.
So, spoiler alert
She does in fact become a slut. The husband sends a letter asking if she was fucking other guys. She gets pregnant, and doesn't know who the father is. She moves in with the narrator. It turns out the husbands question wasn't accusing, he was hoping she was fucking around -- despite there being nothing to support this concept until then. He was counting on his friend fucking her to open her up. He just wasn't counting on her leaving him. The story ends with her still with the asshole friend, but dating the husband. Even by JPB's criteria, the plot is asinine.
Hey, In The Real World
Thanks for giving us the ending, so now we don't have to keep scanning this crap!
Hey, at least he was never "mean"...
....cause that would violate his latent reverence for women...
I am going to finish the story out of curiosity BUT...
I like fucking and everything that goes with it but this is just WRONG! Yes, I know it is just a story and I don't like myself for reading it further.
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