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"Alba" Damned

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by Anonymous

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by reader01804/30/11

very nice story,love it!

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by Anonymous09/21/12

No Build-up

Sorry, but had to get into a story, especially as far fetched as this one, with almost no build-up to the the reader into the story.

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by tnadnuder03/23/14

Just a few small problems

Why is 212 on Floor 20, not 2?!

Also, noticed some missing punctuation.

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by PORNLOVER197609/25/15

GREAT STORY

This is really good!

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