Nicely done. You got the sense of urgency across very well.
You have a good command of the language and you seem to have a real connection with your story. These are rare qualities on this site.
the house burned down because they for got the tea
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Very sweet
Nicely done. You got the sense of urgency across very well.
I hope you decide to write more stories.
You have a good command of the language and you seem to have a real connection with your story. These are rare qualities on this site.
They died
the house burned down because they for got the tea
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