Loved the story and the way you ended it made it a special story and a very good read.
A better finish would be both girls not going on the pill. They should keep having more babies. They should only stop they both turn 40.
I liked the characters and plot line. The grammar was a little loose in places, so you might consider getting an editor to help smooth things out. Might be willing to help out there if you don't have anyone else to help you with that.
Chapters 1 & 2 are basically your "Seducing Your Sister" story, substituting Ashley for one of the sisters and shifting from second person to third person, with the male shifting from being "you" to being "Mike".
How did they explain Kimberly's next kid to their parents, when the twins were supposed to have been from a drunken mistake?
If they were all happy with the kids they had, why wouldn't Mike get snipped, instead of having the girls go on the pill, which isn't 100% effective?
And lastly, a "prologue" comes before a story. It sets the circumstances for the upcoming story. A summation of future events at the end of a story is an "epilogue".
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