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Unjustifiably short
Excellent writing, but far too brief. Especially for BDSM, which is all about teasing and building to a huge climax. I suggest you triple the length of the story. You have the writing skills to flesh this out into a satisfyingly sexy tale, and are smart enough to realize that any new toy as large as a frame deserves a far more elaborate maiden voyage.
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