A Dear John Letter

3*

not bad, but I was hoping for a bit more.

Good story but!

this story feels incomplete. A common problem on Lit.

I CAN SEE A LOT OF AKWARD ENCOUNTERS

throughout their lifes. TK U MLJ LV NV

lost put found again

Read some of your earlier westerns years ago. Just finished your "Cold Steele" series,great as usual. This time added you to a list I have.

would have...

given 5* but it was too good to be so short dammit!!

You Forgot

To end it!

1*

so?

Extremely well done. I was also impressed that you did not need to be grafic about sexual situations. I think I will enjoy reading you.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com

Dear John

I am back to read you again. I see that my 1st comment is at the top of the list. same comment but I am sorry that there are no others they do not know what they are missing.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com

5*'s for the writing - 4*'s for not finishing it = 1*

Really needed another page to tie up Patrick and Ally's relationship.

Just my thoughts, YMMV
Morgan DeWolfe

What???

The writing stopped about a page before the story ended.

Agree with others

Needs a second chapter

FTDS

woodmanone

You know I love you to death. And as the author, you are free to write any damned way you want.

But in the story, you built up the emotional tension to a fervent pitch with the very first meeting between these three...and then you just let all the air out of the balloon, not with a POP, but with a quick fart. I LOVE the way you introduced the characters and built up the relationship, but if essentially everyone is wondering about the ending...do you think we are all wrong?

Granted, a lot of folks could be a lot more respectful in how they approach the issue.

I did understand the message you were trying to send: He was now over her. His finding that zen spot was a bit quick, but that is a quibble. Better than 80% of the stuff out here.

Sorry

But WTF happened here? He gets fucked over (be glad he wasn't married before it happened), finds someone else (that's good), meets her again and snubs her. Big deal. Not worth the time taken to read it.

Harumph

Ended with a resounding thud.

Great Ending

I liked the ending because I recognize the reality of getting over something you thought that you'd never get over. FD45's comment was right in regard to the plot pacing, you had us waiting for the hammer to fall, and when it turn out differently it could have used a bit more flesh on the bones. Still, great.

I was surprised Jerry and Julie felt they could even approach his table

let alone expect a welcome and invitation to sit with him/them.
They must not have read his response to her Dear John.

Ending was a bit abrupt and pointless but...

... in general if a story starts with a dramatic event then flips into back story the reader (me) skips the back story.

ass whipping

Guess his good friend was afraid of and ass whipping and that is why he let his wife do all the talking besides what old times needed to be talked about. He stole his best friends wife to be. The getting up and leaving was truly a slap in the face to his ex girl and ex friend it was worse than a physical slap in the face.
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Very well written.

I wouldn't mind an epilogue. However, the story is complete as is and Woodmanone has done a fine job.
Maybe in his spare time WMO could take the two neat characters, Patrick and Ally, and give us a story about them, I'd hate to think that they would be left to pass into oblivion after such a great start. The little pixie seems to be lovable enough to make a fine life for her and Patrick. This is after all, 'Loving Wives'.

very bad ending to a pretty lame story

reality

great story
you didn't do your research
Being very familiar with Diavik and the mines in Canada
I work at Snap Lake. a DeBeers property
the only mistake you made was that as an american he would and could not have been hired by Diavik mine. BHP the parent company has a policy that only Canadian citizens can be hired at the Diavik mine. he could have been hired s a contractor
also. they work a 2 and 2 rotation, 2 weeks on, 2 weeks off. it is actually against he law in the NWT to spend more than 6 weeks at a remote site without 14n days off

keep up the good work

Well...

Almost 2/3's of a story here. I was hoping for a entertaining ending but the author seemed to get tired of writing and just let the story piss itself away.
3*'s for most of a story.

No Stars For Unfinished Stories

Sorry Charlie...

Disappointed

Great begining but would love for you to continue still i gave it a four star rating because it was good writing