A Dear John Letter

good story

good start. will read part 2 when should we expect it? Thanks Mike from Texas

Outstanding

Excellent story.

What a great

start. Screams for a part two. I can't wait to find out how Julie and Jerry fell so far away from the Barbie and Ken tree.

Lucky Man

First he discovered the real Julie and Jerry and second he discovered Ally. I really enjoyed the story.

A Great Story!

Patrick handled the situation with Julie and Jerry with dignity and maturity. There is no need for a second part since there is no connection with Julie and Jerry. They deserve each other and the best revenge is to live well. Good Riddance!

Their is so much more to say

Enough said!

Well written but incomplete

Nicely written story, but doesn't seem complete. Are you planning a chapter 2 ?
the Ct. Yankee

Enjoyable

I loved the way Patrick handled the suituation with Julie and Jerry throughout the story. Very well mannered and colder then an Iceburg!
Kill them with Kindness!
Perfect!

I would love to see where the future takes Ally and Patrick, is there a next chapter? Hope so!

Not really a coherent story

Starts off with so much about Julie and the Dear John letter, but no strong connection to the end other than the fact that the letter caused him to not get married. So what!! 50 for well written.

It just kind of trailed off at the end.

Was this part one or what?

Great Start

Looking forward to next chapter.

Nice story Woodman.

As always a good read.

Well written but not really a story

The Dear John letter did not have a strong connection to the ending.... except -- well, it didn't work with this person, and it now is with this other person, and I am glad because the first person did not turn out to be such a great human being... ho hum.

Excellent complete story....

....which would only need another chapter to fulfill an agenda not of the authors making.Liked this one even more than the Victoria's Secret one.This was about his life,not Julie's.

Very poor

All of that detailed background that led up to....nothing. anon jerry

And then what?

Your whole story reads like an introduction, leading in to a possible new relationship and then nothing....

Please please, go somewhere with this

???????

Good story but a unfinished ending?

continuence?

we certainly hope you will continue this.

i actually really like this as it is..

ONE RULE U DONT TOUCH MATES GIRLS OR WIFES OR U GET BATTERED. IN OUR GROUP ITS ANO NO SHES A SKANK AND IF HES A FRIEND WHO NEEDS ENEMYS

Great writing, and time to think of another theme.

LW is full of stories about best friend doing the wife/girl friend. It's way too predictable. Your story did have an interesting and intelligent twist for the ending though. For that I thank you.

An enjoyable story

Nicely done and well writen. A good solid storyline and strong characters to make the story believable.

Thanks for the read.

Really liked this one

Wish it was longer.

liked this storey

good read but not finished

Conclusion

Great story as far as it went. Left too much hanging.

DEAR JOHN

Hello Jerry. TK U MLJ LV NV

left hanging

shore nuff left a hanging,you know like life. Well done. There has to be a wiseass remark about revenge and cold cause he was up in the cold north, it sllps me at the moment
Well done as usual

Sad

Another fine story without an ending. sick, sick, sick. come on woodmanone

FINISH IT

i wont vote

Until this is finished. Come on Woodmanome!!!!!!!

That's it?

If this is chapter 1, it's excellent. If this is the whole story, it needs a lot of work and a much better ending.

Well, a very good story as far as it went.

I was planning to read all your "stuff" from the top of the page down but am not happy with being left hanging. What happened to the revenge he planned (or did I just remember wrong, I thought he wanted revenge?). My apologies if you plan to write another chapter although if you leave another story without an ending I will switch back to 'revenge' stories and leave the rest of your writing along. I have already read several of your other stories and liked them so I thought I would just start at the top today. Thank you for writing.

The end?

Good stories need endings, regardless of what some of the authors on this site seem to feel. I agree with most commentary regarding stories like this. PLEASE FINISH YOUR STORIES! I liked this one , as far as you got.

Finish your fucking story, I am so tired with so called authors on this site NOT FINISHING THEIR STORIES, what happened? Did you get bored?

Inability to complete a story...

Indicates a less than competent author.

petered out

failure to launch really. Did the characters stop talking to you?

Okay

I normally don't comment on my stories or on the comments about my work; but this is an exception. I also don't know if anyone goes back and reads comments on a story they have already commented on. But here goes.

Several of the comments say that the reader didn't feel that I finished the story. I guess I can see your point. Many stories on this site, and I enjoy them too, are BTB type. However my intent wasn't to write the normal BTB type story.

I felt and still do that Patrick took the high road by not wasting his time going after revenge on two people who didn't deserve his attention. At least he found out before more damage was done, what kind of people Julie and Jerry are. Besides they are stuck with each other, maybe that's revenge enough.

I felt, and still do, that the obvious decline of Jerry and Julie was sweet justice all by itself.

So far all of you that still think a Chapter 2 is needed, I'm sorry I didn't meet your needs and wishes. Please don't give up on me or my work.

One last thing, an Anonymous Andy wrote that quote "he was so tired with so called authors on this site NOT FINISHING THEIR STORIES" end quote.

If this person will send me his address I will refund the money he spent for reading my story. Oh wait, the site is free.

Another AA said not finishing a story Indicates a less than competent author. I would like very much to read something this person wrote so they could help me become a more competent author.

For all of those that commented thank you. I appreciate you reading my work and taking the time to comment on them.

Please keep reading and I'll keep writing until y'all get tired of my rants.

Thanks

Woodmanone

Every one is a critic

I loved the story. He told them exactly how he felt but couldn't beat anyones ass from Canada. When they tried to say hello after his return, he basically blew them off. I think everyone wanted a part two because they enjoyed part one. I concur.

A bit surprised

I was surprised and disappointed at the rapid ending to this story. I would have preferred that there was a more concrete conclusion. But then, I'm not a writer, and the story isn't mine to finish. I enjoyed what there was of the story.

BUT WHILE THE WORLD SPINS ON

life doesn't remain stagnant, TK U MLJ LV NV

my opinion...

so the story ended the way it should have...leaves the rest to our imagination instead of the author giving us his interpretation...liked it!!

Great

This a great story to put it blunt. And personally would like another chapter mainly because the main protagonist is a level headed constructive individual with a flair I guess you could say. Very relatable in a way as well. By the way the response letters were awesome. Thank you for the enjoyable story and please consider a part two if only to show more of this lovely character and his settling back in to his home town.

Good - short story -

He lived learned moved on and found good -

Julie found fail and it showed - he was not taking her back -

ok

Sometimes I love it when deserving people get burned.....this guy seemed to get past it just fine. Just think, he could have been stuck with her.

Maybe so

living well might just be the best revenge, sometimes. This case didn't call for much in the way of revenge, looked like time and excess were going to get the revenge on the two perps for him. She should have been up front with him about what was going on. He had enough pride that he would have let her go without her cheating on him with Jerry.

Missed it

Damn, I missed the romance part of this story, well didn't I?
Too bad the author didn't see the necessity of "Finishing the Damn Story"!

Don't usually comment

on my own work but I just couldn't resist a rebuttal to Anon (Just a lazy fuck).
I feel the story is finished. If you don't agree I invite you to not read my works again. Also
If you will please send me you Lit name so I can check out all your stories, I would appreciate it. I'm sure I can learn something from an author of such renown.

Woodmanone

About a "Dear John" letter

When you look at such a letter there is one thing allways present or should i say more than one : the writer is a coward and is ashamed and allso scared of the consequences ,the same words allways come back "i'm so sorry","i couldn't help myself"; you will allways have a place in my heart" and more of the same BS
For the recipient it is hell,emotional hell, in most cases the feeling of being powerless and helpless is overpowering
Yet hunderds of these letters are sent every year to some poor kid who wonders what he did do to deserve this,doesn't that say a lot of the weman who write those ??
woodmanone you wrote a story with a happy ending ,in there allone there is romance i guess,pitty it isn't allways like this.......

I liked it

I would have found more backstory on the diamond mine interesting. I like Son House, the blues singer. He had a phrase, "If you don't want to be with me, why the hell would I want to be with you?" So if she decided she wanted Jerry, go for it girl, you saved me from a miserable marriage! No point in beating up Jerry, Ok if he fucked her and pushed her cheating ass back to you to marry, but here he did a good thing. He cheated with her and then married her cheating ass. That's different.
On the other hand, after all or that, there's no reason to put up with either of them, so pushing off was what I would have done.
You could expand the story, but as is, it has a decent and logical conclusion. Personally in part to avoid too short a story, I do a double, really two complete stories, in which case the second story would be about the protagonist and his new girl friend.

Chilley

Well written but incomplete story.

It felt like you ran out of ideas with this story. Boy gets girl, girl dumps boy, boy moves on to ???? Yes he's going out with another girl. No he doesn't want to talk to his ex-girlfriend or ex-best friend. And then - nothing. I'm going to agree with the majority of other commentators, both Anon and named Anon's. This was well written, but unfinished. And I had to laugh at the author's comment. So what if anyone commenting hasn't written a story and posted it? Doesn't mean they don't have an opinion about what you wrote and posted. If you don't want anonymous comments, don't allow them. Otherwise suck it up, ignore them and move on. Arguing with commentators is like pissing into the wind. Useless. And it makes you a mess.