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Captain of the Guard

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous12/05/09

Full of detail

I thought this was an interesting piece, full of description and well organized. However, you need to be careful with punctuation; I got confused at some points because some punctuation was missing, and I had to reread. See about finding a good editor/proof reader (this site offers voluntary ones). But don't stop writing: I liked the style.

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by kelly_kelly12/14/09

I'd love to read more of this

Interesting story, I'd love to read more of this one. Good job, please continue this tale.

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by stfrog08/02/11

A story in need of a sequel

Well, don't keep us hanging here! And then what happened?

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