by JakesZA
I thought that your story would be interesting but then I ran into all of the grammatical errors. Misspellings and usages ectera. For instance at one point you say "manager slash agent" it should be manager/agent. Some of your misspellings include rooky- should be rookie. And the word is fucking not fucken, which is as far as I know not even a word.
I'm not english speaking and only have word to correct mistakes, so rather tell me the story is shit than criticise the spelling...lol
author if english is not your language then you can use a volunteer editor to help you. try it. it will make a difference