I like this kind of a story...I hope you write more.
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Anonymous12/19/09
Great!
I think this might be the one that finally gets me to admit my literotica addiction to my husband...great story and great writing.
by
Anonymous12/20/09
Loved it!
I don't comment on the stories often, but I absolutely loved this! Long enough to explore the situation to the full, but short enough to suggest the intensity of the encounter, and to leave the reader wanting more- and the ending neatly left open with a teaser of where the couple are going next- Great stuff,it really ticked all the boxes for me
I absolutely LOVE the public comments! I'm so very glad you guys took the time to do so, especially the person who said that they don't comment often (that's a compliment!) and to the woman who's thinking about sharing her love for (lit)erotica with her husband I think you should! Not as a confession but perhaps you could share one of your favorite stories during sex. Whisper your dirty tale in his ear, draw it out while you play, I'm sure he'll love it.
I've always thought that the biggest compliment is
...successfully dragging a reader into a literotica category they usually don't bother with. You just did it to me. Again. You have a gift for graphic detail that is just sinfully and sensually artful. Like your Dirty Train Girl tale that first lured me in, this too is slick, hot, dirty and smart. Frankly, I'm beginning to think you are too. :) Congrats on another winner. -PF
That was truly delicious. When he came home and found her on her knees I didn't know what would happen, you pulled me along and it was fantastic! Erotic and loving. So cool to see a hot married couple.
English
Loved it!
I like this kind of a story...I hope you write more.
Great!
I think this might be the one that finally gets me to admit my literotica addiction to my husband...great story and great writing.
Loved it!
I don't comment on the stories often, but I absolutely loved this! Long enough to explore the situation to the full, but short enough to suggest the intensity of the encounter, and to leave the reader wanting more- and the ending neatly left open with a teaser of where the couple are going next- Great stuff,it really ticked all the boxes for me
Great job!
Great story! Well told, vivid, and very exciting!
Great job!
Great story! Well told, vivid, and very exciting!
Excellent
Almost like I was there, well written!
Hot
Very nice, simple, but erotic short story.
Comment from Author
I absolutely LOVE the public comments! I'm so very glad you guys took the time to do so, especially the person who said that they don't comment often (that's a compliment!) and to the woman who's thinking about sharing her love for (lit)erotica with her husband I think you should! Not as a confession but perhaps you could share one of your favorite stories during sex. Whisper your dirty tale in his ear, draw it out while you play, I'm sure he'll love it.
I've always thought that the biggest compliment is
...successfully dragging a reader into a literotica category they usually don't bother with. You just did it to me. Again. You have a gift for graphic detail that is just sinfully and sensually artful. Like your Dirty Train Girl tale that first lured me in, this too is slick, hot, dirty and smart. Frankly, I'm beginning to think you are too. :) Congrats on another winner. -PF
Hot
Sexy stuff, hope there's more,
hot!
So hot! More more more please.
Delicious
That was truly delicious. When he came home and found her on her knees I didn't know what would happen, you pulled me along and it was fantastic! Erotic and loving. So cool to see a hot married couple.
wow
loved it!! so hot!
This is dirty and oh so hot. Great work! :D
(I especially love the writing--it reads like a real person, a real woman. Makes it much easier to get into. Lovely!)
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