Cinema Fun

Great story!

Looking forward to further submissions!

Pretty good...

It felt a little like a diamond in the rough. There were a few spelling errors, but overall pretty good. I would recommend more dialogue or breaking it up into smaller paragraphs

Read before posting

I don't ordinarily quibble with minor errors of spelling and punctuation, but the mess this is shows you didn't even read it once before posting it. You absolutely have to sit back and read. Typing while excited leads to all sorts of mistakes. In just the first three paragraphs: in to - Iv - with out - (lower case beginning sentence) - grouping - Min's - husbands - my the

A Charming Romp at the Cinema!

At first I thought 'just another cinema sex romp', but no, I got a sensitive, erotic vision of a hot young lady passionately responding to her body's most interesting urges. Somehow you made it sound very believable and real. The 'litmus' test, and basically why I read the stories here, is whether I get aroused or not. This is cock in hand stuff! I have visions of naked breasts, legs spread on the seat and your partner's cock exposed in the semi-darkness. Don't worry about the construction just put more of this on paper for me to enjoy.

Nice beginning

Amy, you show a talent that could be classed as "Diamond in the Rough". I think that talent shoud be polished because I see the possibility of you becoming a firs rate writer. First I would make use of the volunteer editor, second, the comment you have about reading your own work prior to posting is very valid, 3rd, you may want to practice your writing. It is just like practicing the piano. The more you do it the better you get. You reread your work and see where this might be phrased another way or that would work better over here.

This was a perfect combo of sexual description but leaving enough unsaid to let ones imagination fill in the blanks. For me that makes it the most stimulating. Keep writing! I'll read it!

Great

Good job with the story, it really got me turned on!

having him cum hard it to your mouth

brilliant story cinema fun. reading this awesome story was likw watching it taking place, awessome story very exciting and so very hot and horny.