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by greenmountaineer12/11/09

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I enjoyed the poem until the last line, which ended too abruptly for me. If the wounds were more than a bed bug's, which I presume they were, some further metaphor about wounds might have served well, perhaps the wounds the parents themselves have or know their children will experience later in life. Absent something like that, the last line felt like a cliche. Neat and tidy and fascinating to me otherwise.

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by sir_goodhead12/17/09

good poem

an overabundance of punctuation when one considers your enjambments. Enjoyed.









* I don't use the thermometer.*

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