All Comments on 'The Field Trip'

The poor grammar made this story very unreadable. The content was good, but you need to get some help with the shift of tense and person.

Overall, well done due to the descriptive words used to have her getting taken. A little bit more insight as to her POV and why she chose him. Perhaps, more of a build up to the flashing of her panties prior to the "hurried" taking.

not to sure about this....her ass came on your finger not sure it works that way. she came, her ass didn't.

Somehow this story moved much faster than it should have for having gotten three cherries. No build up and it seemed to just drop off the page when it ended.