All Comments on 'Oliver Teases His Sister Ch. 05'

I like the pace the story is moving at and where things are going. Don't get too rushed :)

There were some distracting grammatical errors though, 'she' should have been 'me' or 'my' in a few spots and I noticed a slip back to first person.

It might help to get an editor or stick with first person, it seemed to work ok for the first 4 chapters.

Great series so far, can't wait to read what happens next!

wow superb, like the Jealousy part !!

cant wait ;)

2.30 in the morning when she climbs in bed with him and he's taking off her jeans! It appears English is not your first language so use the editors, improve readability as well.

Beautiful and so Erotic.

Excellent story

Can’t wait to see what happens next