I love sweet little girls like this that are so nasty and do such nasty things.
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Anonymous08/31/04
learn to write
your english is so poor that it destroys your story
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Anonymous11/30/04
Proof read your work before submission!
In paragraph three you change from telling us, your readers, that you have been having sex with your daughter since she was eighteen, to talking directly to your daughter and telling her how she kissed your lips. Which is it? Are you talking to us, your readers, or is this a letter to your daughter? You can't have it both ways! Spellcheck and proof readyour work!!
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Anonymous01/13/08
Please
If you don't know basic grammar, don't write...Please
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Anonymous04/18/08
grammar comes above all
sugardaddy, please study a bit grammar before you write another story.
English
Good Little girls
I love sweet little girls like this that are so nasty and do such nasty things.
learn to write
your english is so poor that it destroys your story
Proof read your work before submission!
In paragraph three you change from telling us, your readers, that you have been having sex with your daughter since she was eighteen, to talking directly to your daughter and telling her how she kissed your lips. Which is it? Are you talking to us, your readers, or is this a letter to your daughter? You can't have it both ways! Spellcheck and proof readyour work!!
Please
If you don't know basic grammar, don't write...Please
grammar comes above all
sugardaddy, please study a bit grammar before you write another story.
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