Cheating is a very destructive thing no matter which one does it, not a happy story but well written, thanks.
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Anonymous12/19/09
A woman finally realizes she isnt the center of
everything. She is just a slut that ruined herself, her marriage, and in a way her husband. Maybe she just needs to terminate herself she is so useless and uncaring for the hatred she heaped upon her husband by her actions.
One wonders how she and Chaz found themselves cheating if she felt so strongly about her husband. People who do not read literotica loving wives tales are always being surprised by the price of betrayal! They never evaluated the probable results.
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Anonymous12/19/09
Good and realistic
You bet, there is a price for cheating. In this case, loneliness and regret. ML
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Anonymous12/19/09
very good
very good, the way cheating spouses should be treated.
Flash stories are a lazy writers way of not having to do the work of developing characters and plot. As you indicate, just a scene. Unfortunate in that the scene is written quite well.
....This was an excellent snippet, flash or not.By Mcw's reasoning, a short story is just an excuse for a novelist not to develop their characters! Estupido!
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Anonymous12/20/09
an ok flash
nothing special about it, since nothing --- neither idea nor character --- is developed.
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Anonymous12/20/09
Applause Author - Very Nice Work
A snippet about feelings displayed and earned.
Nice work Author.
With High Regard
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Anonymous12/20/09
Painfully Accurate
And it is true, in life. (Applicable to friendships as well as to romance.) The opposite of love is not hate; it's complete indifference.
-- KK in Texas
In a very short piece you were able to tell us all we need to know about these two people. Well Done. I disagree with the one comment that a flash story is a lazy way to write. I have written several stories myself and for me a "flash" story is very hard to do. It takes a lot of work to paint the entire picture in a few words. Like you work, please keep it up.
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Anonymous01/17/10
Brilliant
A painful exercise in regret. Or moving on.
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Anonymous04/30/10
No sympathy from me. She deserves his indifference.
I liked the story. A kind of which there is far too little of at times. It was realistic and poignant and reflected what happens to people AFTER the divorce. We fail to recognize that a divorce changes everyone involved no matter what the reason. The wife changes, the husband, even the kids.
Good effort!
OH, for those who don't get it...the Opposite of Love is not Hate. It is Indifference!
In a flash story, it is about the emotions. They are like a picture, they are worth a thousand words..... The emotions elicited by this quick story are extremely deep and poiniant. Great story!!!
The wife in this story has condemned herself to her own personal hell. I would have liked to hear why she trashed her marriage. Was it a slow death or quick and painful after the discovery of her betrayal?
One thing that I usually comment on with most authors is that of grammar and style.
Things they get wrong. Continual mistakes they make.
I don't know who is doing your editing or if my grammar scanner is broken but I haven't read a single story yet (only three so far) where I've noticed a glaring mistake.
I really did not want to feel sorry for her but I did. A bit more information on what she had done to end her marriage would probably have cured that.
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Anonymous03/08/12
Very nice story from ex-wife's point of view
Nice story from ex-wife view point.
Would like ex-husband's point of view.
Apparently ex-wife still have feelings for the ex-husband and is surprised at his lack of reaction to her date.
Seeing a cheating ex-wife realize that her husband moved on without her, in fact acting like she never existed, makes her humiliation complete. She still should have caught aids, however.
So much revealed in so few words - characters brought to life, emotions displayed and, above all, the only kind of revenge that is completely satisfying.
Interestingly this story points out that while cheaters cheat their spouses out of a marriage, they do the same to themselves and worse. They cheat themselves out of their honor, self respect, the respect of all who know them and the future that they had worked for years to obtain.
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Anonymous05/06/13
I gave it 5 stars ...
... I wish it could be true. But it is unlikely, cheaters blame others. It is never their fault.
Panther Fan.
She will have more regrets to come in her future. Harold will move on, she will not. She may continue to drift from man to man, but what kind of man would want a cheating wife? No man she could ever respect. If she tried to keep her past a secret, then that secret will be a wedge between them. Either way, she will always regret her actions if only for the selfish reason that it was bad for her, let alone Harold.
Meaning that you still feel SOMETHING towards her. Nothing hurts more than indifference. It means that she is so small in your memory that she doesn't matter either way to you. It means that she matters so little that she cannot even evoke a simple emotion from you. The best vengeance anyone can reap on another, is to forget them completely, while they are still fixated on you!
Unless he's a total ass, most people wouldn't tell someone who had cooked for them that she wasn't a good cook. They might say, "it was a little over done for me," or something like that. He was doing fine at ACTING indifferent until that barb. Fortunately for him, she didn't catch his slip.
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Anonymous11/12/14
sdc97230, I think your wrong
I have a child with my ex-wife and other than dealing with the child. She is a non factor in my life. I think about her as much as dust on my car. You wash it off and keep going. She married the guy she cheated with and the only thing I ever tell him is don't touch my son. One night he got drunk and put her ass in the hospital. Her mom call and asked could she stay with me, I said no and life went on. She asked if I could help her get an apartment. I said no, because it would take money out of my and my sons household. Then she went and tried to get custody back. It was a no go because she signed it away because of her husband. Now I'm married and we have a 5 member family and she has nothing. She just doesn't exist.
The opposite of love is not the hate but the neutrality. Her exhusband reached the neutrality now and he was honest at the end. She did not reach the neutrality so his neutrality was a very good ROMANTIC REVENGE SITUATION!
I do agree with duna's comments regarding neutrality.
I have GF's to be up set that I have ignored them in public. Some how after they have cheated or end the relationshipbetween us as it was them that had changed. Only to see them teo weeks later with a new man, strange that !
I always believe best revenge is a life well lived and that's what i did. Ended up marring a lovely woman, made enough money to be comfortable. I know some of my ex GF's are in rented accommodation as their financial situation due to their partners did not work out that well for them, ha, ha, lol
I liked the fact that he was able to just go on with his life. I'm sure he still felt something for his wife, but after being betrayed by her cheating, he had a choice of crying and pissing and moaning or sucking it up and going on with his life. Nothing to be gained from crying all the time. He did nothing wrong, if we can believe the clues from the story so why should he show he is weak and dwell on his loss? Ego is not a character flaw, it is in fact a sense of self and self worth. We all have it and the only people who don't want men to have a good sense of self worth are psychologists and the women who are trying to manipulate them. Thanks for sharing your story.
English
Excellent Story
Cheating is a very destructive thing no matter which one does it, not a happy story but well written, thanks.
A woman finally realizes she isnt the center of
everything. She is just a slut that ruined herself, her marriage, and in a way her husband. Maybe she just needs to terminate herself she is so useless and uncaring for the hatred she heaped upon her husband by her actions.
Nice Snapshot
One wonders how she and Chaz found themselves cheating if she felt so strongly about her husband. People who do not read literotica loving wives tales are always being surprised by the price of betrayal! They never evaluated the probable results.
Good and realistic
You bet, there is a price for cheating. In this case, loneliness and regret. ML
very good
very good, the way cheating spouses should be treated.
Good Job
Short. Concise. Sad.
Thanks for sharing.
Good Story.
Cheating and divorce are ugly and painful and sometimes takes years to get over the anger, pain and resentment.
Excellent snap shot
Well written and to the point!!!
This is what writing is about!!!!
This short bittersweet story told me everything I needed to know from the beginning to end. Give us more of this wonderful writing." Thank You "
weak
Flash stories are a lazy writers way of not having to do the work of developing characters and plot. As you indicate, just a scene. Unfortunate in that the scene is written quite well.
re: "weak"....
....This was an excellent snippet, flash or not.By Mcw's reasoning, a short story is just an excuse for a novelist not to develop their characters! Estupido!
an ok flash
nothing special about it, since nothing --- neither idea nor character --- is developed.
Applause Author - Very Nice Work
A snippet about feelings displayed and earned.
Nice work Author.
With High Regard
Painfully Accurate
And it is true, in life. (Applicable to friendships as well as to romance.) The opposite of love is not hate; it's complete indifference.
-- KK in Texas
Very nice work
In a very short piece you were able to tell us all we need to know about these two people. Well Done. I disagree with the one comment that a flash story is a lazy way to write. I have written several stories myself and for me a "flash" story is very hard to do. It takes a lot of work to paint the entire picture in a few words. Like you work, please keep it up.
Brilliant
A painful exercise in regret. Or moving on.
No sympathy from me. She deserves his indifference.
Maybe no sympathy..but understanding
I liked the story. A kind of which there is far too little of at times. It was realistic and poignant and reflected what happens to people AFTER the divorce. We fail to recognize that a divorce changes everyone involved no matter what the reason. The wife changes, the husband, even the kids.
Good effort!
OH, for those who don't get it...the Opposite of Love is not Hate. It is Indifference!
Character development?
In a flash story, it is about the emotions. They are like a picture, they are worth a thousand words..... The emotions elicited by this quick story are extremely deep and poiniant. Great story!!!
Wow...Short and to the point.
The wife in this story has condemned herself to her own personal hell. I would have liked to hear why she trashed her marriage. Was it a slow death or quick and painful after the discovery of her betrayal?
Great Shorty!!!!!!
I like your style. Thanks for sharing.
Very nice!
One thing that I usually comment on with most authors is that of grammar and style.
Things they get wrong. Continual mistakes they make.
I don't know who is doing your editing or if my grammar scanner is broken but I haven't read a single story yet (only three so far) where I've noticed a glaring mistake.
Short and sweet story.
Didn't Want To
I really did not want to feel sorry for her but I did. A bit more information on what she had done to end her marriage would probably have cured that.
Very nice story from ex-wife's point of view
Nice story from ex-wife view point.
Would like ex-husband's point of view.
Apparently ex-wife still have feelings for the ex-husband and is surprised at his lack of reaction to her date.
Perfect
Seeing a cheating ex-wife realize that her husband moved on without her, in fact acting like she never existed, makes her humiliation complete. She still should have caught aids, however.
HA Ha ha
A DEAD EVEN DIG
ego in the bedroom versus ego in the kitchen....TK U MLJ LV NV
Great story
Fun point of view and insight
Very well done...
I enjoyed it very much, thanks.
That is writing of a very high quality.
So much revealed in so few words - characters brought to life, emotions displayed and, above all, the only kind of revenge that is completely satisfying.
Who Did She Cheat On
Interestingly this story points out that while cheaters cheat their spouses out of a marriage, they do the same to themselves and worse. They cheat themselves out of their honor, self respect, the respect of all who know them and the future that they had worked for years to obtain.
I gave it 5 stars ...
... I wish it could be true. But it is unlikely, cheaters blame others. It is never their fault.
Panther Fan.
Perfect
Absolutely perfect.
Well done and...
you achieved your objective with this tale.
THE ONE CHEATING ISNT SUPPOSED TO HAVE REGRETS
until they finally realize???????? TK U MLJ LV NV
Regrets
She will have more regrets to come in her future. Harold will move on, she will not. She may continue to drift from man to man, but what kind of man would want a cheating wife? No man she could ever respect. If she tried to keep her past a secret, then that secret will be a wedge between them. Either way, she will always regret her actions if only for the selfish reason that it was bad for her, let alone Harold.
Loved it
Five stars. Very well done.
Nice
Indifference. The indifference is destroying her. Stupid bitch.
Five Stars
Indefference...
Indefference is 1.000 times worst than hate...Well written
A WOMAN WITH REGRETS?
LIKE A PIG WITH WINGS...NEVER GONNA HAPPEN
great story
no, i just cant stop thinking about her. no i miss her. no lets talk so we can reconnect. just fuck off. i love it.
Hate is an emotion
Meaning that you still feel SOMETHING towards her. Nothing hurts more than indifference. It means that she is so small in your memory that she doesn't matter either way to you. It means that she matters so little that she cannot even evoke a simple emotion from you. The best vengeance anyone can reap on another, is to forget them completely, while they are still fixated on you!
I don't think he's really indifferent to her
Unless he's a total ass, most people wouldn't tell someone who had cooked for them that she wasn't a good cook. They might say, "it was a little over done for me," or something like that. He was doing fine at ACTING indifferent until that barb. Fortunately for him, she didn't catch his slip.
sdc97230, I think your wrong
I have a child with my ex-wife and other than dealing with the child. She is a non factor in my life. I think about her as much as dust on my car. You wash it off and keep going. She married the guy she cheated with and the only thing I ever tell him is don't touch my son. One night he got drunk and put her ass in the hospital. Her mom call and asked could she stay with me, I said no and life went on. She asked if I could help her get an apartment. I said no, because it would take money out of my and my sons household. Then she went and tried to get custody back. It was a no go because she signed it away because of her husband. Now I'm married and we have a 5 member family and she has nothing. She just doesn't exist.
To anonymous
I'm sure your son will thank you when he's older.
Opposite of love
The opposite of love is not the hate but the neutrality. Her exhusband reached the neutrality now and he was honest at the end. She did not reach the neutrality so his neutrality was a very good ROMANTIC REVENGE SITUATION!
Duna
Next
bill...
Opposite of Love is Indifference!
I do agree with duna's comments regarding neutrality.
I have GF's to be up set that I have ignored them in public. Some how after they have cheated or end the relationshipbetween us as it was them that had changed. Only to see them teo weeks later with a new man, strange that !
I always believe best revenge is a life well lived and that's what i did. Ended up marring a lovely woman, made enough money to be comfortable. I know some of my ex GF's are in rented accommodation as their financial situation due to their partners did not work out that well for them, ha, ha, lol
Good one
Good story, original for this site.
I liked the fact that he was able to just go on with his life. I'm sure he still felt something for his wife, but after being betrayed by her cheating, he had a choice of crying and pissing and moaning or sucking it up and going on with his life. Nothing to be gained from crying all the time. He did nothing wrong, if we can believe the clues from the story so why should he show he is weak and dwell on his loss? Ego is not a character flaw, it is in fact a sense of self and self worth. We all have it and the only people who don't want men to have a good sense of self worth are psychologists and the women who are trying to manipulate them. Thanks for sharing your story.
Hum
Short, but very definitive of how divorced parties can react towards each other after the divorce had been final for a period of time.
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