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Honeymoon at the Cabin Ch. 02

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous12/20/09

I hate stories written in the third person

It tells me that you are a controlling motherfucker

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by Anonymous12/20/09

Second person, as it happens.

First person is 'I', second person is 'you' and the third person is 'he' or 'she'. I don't like second person stories either, but for the reason that it always makes me feel slightly uneasy that the author seems to be adressing me directly - and I know I wasn't involved. Shame really, it would be good in the third person.

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by AzPilot12/20/09

Hey, people, it's a good story, well told.

If left to "anonymous" it might not be much. I'd like to see them do any better. I try, but you have done well so far with this story. Please keep going.

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