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Different
Good story, my idea of swinging also, thanks.
only
only the truth.
Style!
Liked your terse prose style; minor editing needed.
Good but atypical H20wader story
Well written story but not a normal H2owader story.
the Ct. Yankee
Not bad.
This was an OK effort, although it reads like English is not your primary language.
The plot and especially the ending was similar to a tale by The Drifter, published online several years ago. Readers who liked your story would probably find Drifter's to be even better.
Good Flash Story
It is probable that our protagonist will be declared a wimp because he did not kick to the curb when he got Syphilis diagnosis. Nothing like documenting but he did not give anyone time to get down and dirty. It is almost a sure thing that her shyster will contest the divorce! The touch of flu was a nice way to avoid drinking from the poisoned cup.
just a bit
to short. would have liked to see how he found out more after the diagnosis of the std. how he controlled himself not show his wife he knew... and so on. find somebody to read proof if you write longer chapters and think it is necessary.
Not a bad concept, seems rushed.
there was no foreshadowning of wife starting without him... so it seemed to wrap-up real fast.
Glad to see you back!!
Glad to see you back, I really missed your stories. Please keep them coming.
I liked it!
It was short sweet and to the point!!
I admit I read it twice, but it I thought it was a good snapshot into what happened. No one including the wife knew what was going on
And this way he gets a divorce, while he'll have to pay for it, most states do the whole "If your convicted of a felony at the time of divorce the innocent mate will get a better diversion of assets" thing. So this was a good revenge (^_^)
Thanks, I liked the story (^_^)
-Risq
Well done despite what others object to
Perhaps what they are really reacting to is that the fact that the behavior described isnt normal or legal but in fact totally deviate in behavior. I was a swinger and people like described in this story would have been shut out from the group. Could describe what happened when people brought girl of 17 into the action including one man with is daughter and what happened when the group shut them out but not enough time here. And 17 was legal there.
Short and sweet
Glad to see you back and writing. I hope you submit more stories your earlier ones were very good as was this one.
Sad
The story was poor enough by itself. But when an author has no more respect for his readers than is shown by the lack of simple proof reading, I simply put the author on my "Don'r Bother List." The score reflects my respect for the author. If the finished project is just the best you can do, then stop writing.
Livonia, hm?
Had to look that one up. Gets you 50. Syph case was nice too.
Yeah! He's Back!
It's so nice to finally see another story from one of my favorite authors. "My Biggest Mistake" is the best story I've ever read on this site. I am sorry it got pulled.
Please give us more!!!!
Yeah! He's Back!
It's so nice to finally see another story from one of my favorite authors. "My Biggest Mistake" is the best story I've ever read on this site. I am sorry it got pulled.
Please give us more!!!!
oh?
i thought water wader was a good writer. This grammar is awful, and the content is pitiful.
Nice concept story
Not a bad outline for a story. It needs more meat on it to rightfully be called a story. Though I did like what I saw. A better editor would be nice too.
Tyr
Atta Boy
Way to go !!!
Now that is a simple winner
Burn them to the ground -
Hang 'em where the world can see the corpses
Stupid is as stupid does - she had already cheated - and was trying to trap in in this sick child abuse scheme - (even without underage kids it was dishonest for her and she got what she deserved)
PISS ME OFF......
I will show you whats what. TK U MLJ LV NV
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