All Comments on 'A Bad Day in Dream World'

by JellyPie

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PistolpackinpetePistolpackinpeteabout 14 years ago
You have the makings of ....

...a writer but need to practice the format of a story, not just a 'passage'. For instance, since your description states it, have her actually "go" there, first. Not many people like to read one page out of the middle of a book.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
This was confusing...

As the other person said, its like a passage out of the middle of a book. How did Gwen get there, what is the history of the dream world, and who is this lover of her's?

KardasKardasalmost 14 years ago
Not bad, not bad at all.

I've read quite a few tentacle sex stories, but not many authors can quite pull it off. You also brought a very surreal feeling to the story, quite appropriate to the setting. A highly creative and arousing tale, great work.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Pleasing

I can successfully say you executed this story i loved it best tentacle sex storie ever

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

Mmmm, i wouldnt call that a BAD day!! i would love to be double fucked by tentacles!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago

I want more of this story as well please because I want to see what happens to her. So please more chapters of this story as well please.Thank you very much.

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